Smile

My first Seynru poem

Smile

smiling old woman

colourful wet clothes hanging

wind blows sandy dirt

Author's Note

Hi there,
If you read any of my work I would appreciate a review. Constructive critics are always welcome. I always leave reviews for everything I read.

Reviews

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

A mesmerizing haiku. One that speaks of life in such a simple action. It brings back a lot of memories to my mind. Especially watching my grandmother hanging wet clothes out to dry back in the late 60's and early 70's. It is a simple moment that leaves a lifetime impression upon the heart. Excellent work on these words.

[Lisasview]

hi carlos long time no see... typing with my left finger because i broke my clavicle bone...
anyway, this is not a haiku..it is a senyru poem.. first i have ever written.. i am so happy that it brought back happy memories...
lisa, trying to deal with the pain

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like this, Lisa. It brings images of being near the ocean, perhaps the Algarve, where warm wind makes you smile but is hell on the drying clothes.

Winston

[Lisasview]

I appreciate your kind review Winston...
hell on doing clothes made me laugh..
Lisa, smiling

[willweb]

A beautiful poetic portrait of sunny days and easier times. Loved this Lisa. I remember helping my grandmother hanging clothes on the clotheslines and the aroma of freshly washed sheets. Thank you for sharing this.

[Lisasview]

So sorry to be late in responding to your lovely review.
I am still dealing with my broken clavicle...
Lisa

[Patricia Wedel]

I love windy days .. walking on a Sandy Beach… waiting for an Old Sea Captain to return… Amen… Pat

[Lisasview]

What a lovely thing to say!

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Lisa…. My husband Roger has spoken of how his Mother Jane would hang clothes outdoors on a Windy day… where they lived on the Beach in Staten Island, New York USA… as she was waiting for Roger’s Father Ed to return from the Merchant Marines…
that is why my review of your Seynru came to mind. When I was growing up in Maryland.. Women loved to hang clothes outdoors in the Summer months as a Wind would gently help to dry sheets and clothes. The smell of fresh air and lavender would permeate the bedrooms and closets. The photo of the sheets drying in the Wind is lovely. Wishing you a Summer of soft breezes. gently, Pat

[Nima.Hope]

A lovely haiku dear Lisa, you've brought a moment of your life into written words, the transforming of joy.
How are you doing dear Lisa? How is Spain in the spring?
All the best wishes
Numa

[Lisasview]

Good morning Nima,
Thank you for your lovely review...
Spring is so lovely here..but then again I feel it is always lovely here.
I am typing with my left finger because I broke my clavicle bone a couple of days ago and can not se my right arm. Not happy about that...
Lisa

[Nima.Hope]

Yes Spain is the country of joy.
I hope you'll recover it as soon as possible, do take care and don't let it bring you down Ma'am 🙂

[Lisasview]

oh gosh nothing brings me down..
Did you read Awaken..I think you would like it

[Nima.Hope]

،I will check it ASAP dear Lisa, surely I'm a big fan of you🤍

[Lisasview]

What a lovely thing to say!

[light and ashes]

I really like this........very charming.

[Lisasview]

such a fun structure..i so enjoyed writing it.

[light and ashes]

awesome..it shows :)

[Temperance]

I love the simplicity of this. Reading it backwards; the wind blows sandy dirt on the clothes so they get washed and the old women is happy that the clothes are clean again. :)
Aren't we all happy when the washing is done? I read about you breaking your clavicle. I hope you are healing fast and well. Prayers for you for a fast recovery. Temp

[Lisasview]

Funny to hear from you Temp, as I was just thinking of you and that we have not connected in quite some time...
this was my first try at this and I really enjoyed it.
Yes, poor me and mt broken clavicle...i am typing with one finger ..left hand..not easy.
if you have the time you might like to read some of my new ones... like Awaken...or...
hugs, Lisa, dealing with the pain

[Chris Shaw]

I did smile Lisa. That’s what you call sod’s law. Just when everything is going well, something comes along to mess it up. You also took me back to my mum’s washdays.

Well done for trying this form.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Thank you Chris
We call it Murphy Law
I enjoyed my first try.
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

We can't help but smile when things go our way in the winds of change, and frown when they don't. I hope this dear woman keep smiling.
Old age is a must.

[Lisasview]

oh yes, when we are old we keep smiling..well, i think so...

[Lisasview]

I am now in my 75th year so yes old age is a must!!

[Sami Khalil]

Wowzy woooo! You are welcome.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is my childhood soul reminiscing, remembering the smell of fresh-folded linens like a basket of laundered snow.

[Lisasview]

Thank you Linda..my very first try at this form..