Elemental Escape

And I grew tired;

dizzy from being thrown about

in the wind of whims

No longer sure where you stand

in a world that won't stop spinning

but knowing that I don't;

for the chaos carries me 

and my feet have never touched the ground.

And I grew tired

of holding up the earth,

arms shaking from the weight of won't

And gravity grew tired,

tied to me

upon scorched earth;

our common ground

And I grew tired

of the fire that burned me up inside

All consuming flame of fear

And me; a little in love

with the warmth

Mesmerized by a burning boy,

doused in doubt

And I grew tired

of the sometimes depth;

heavy as an uncertain silence

And drowning in darkness,

my words floating through you 

as the rain changes the sea

And all I need is unbreathed air

Reviews

[Ed Hart]

and what a statement this is! another powerful declaration of being

[GBU POETRY ONLY]

The elements whether man maded or natural definitely swirls us humans around & EE covers us with your blanket sentiment ... There are wonderful metaphoric phrases to die for: 'winds of whim','doused in doubt', "heavy as uncertain silence'... Loved the title.. Great phrase that matches a great poem. 100% poetry .. Good job, L
GBU

[Ghostshell]

hahaha, we are all one, aren't we? This is great. Again you use elemental imagery so well with so much emotion.

[asdarkeyesclose]

'And I grew tired
of holding up the earth,
arms shaking from the weight of won't
And gravity grew tired,
tied to me
upon scorched earth;'

well this just blew me away, some gorgeous descriptions, i loved the image of holding up the world and i also thought this exceptional:

'a little in love
with the warmth
Mesmerized by a burning boy,'

and that's all before we reach the final stanza which is equally stunning. This is writing to be proud of.

[Scytheriax]

I loved the diction and the emotion of this piece. You can feel the narrator's weariness through the repetition as well as the diction chosen.
Very well written.