calm kid

based on when i got bullied in rutlish. nobody knows exactly how much it did to me. but shows outwardly more and more as i get older. also used a quote from expendables here!

The calm kid

Silent kid

no one knows the problem

solitary confinement

self kept mental asylum.

holding razor blades for the hope of salvation

marking up the days on the fleshy walls of his brain.

The fall of the failing mind.

Decay of demeanour

But

he makes light of it.

Make do with the brunt of it

There will be a time to go dark

And when he does...

he’ll go pitch black. 

Reviews

[Fréyjä Helv..]

Pretty deep... the emotion intense... like it...

[Steven Cash]

wow... just wow

shame too

[SHEEMA HUQ]

somehow i'm urging for more detail to this story, although the poem stands well on its own

[nigrum homonculus]

yeah i didn't want to dwell on this for too long. it would whiney otherwise. i got a couple of others that tie in to this though...want me to send an RR to you?

[SHEEMA HUQ]

by all means, but do occassionally respond to mine sometimes too...

[nigrum homonculus]

yeah sorry about that, i'll get on it right away!

[SHEEMA HUQ]

save your apologies, i just feel like a batty old aunty nagging you...you should only respond to what you feel like appraising...i would just prefer more balance in our rapport, espcially as it's likely that we'll meet up sometime seen as though we live pretty close! laters

[That_Girl]

"solitary confinement
self kept mental asylum" Love those two lines! This isn't like any other 'bully' oriented piece out there and I applaud you for that. You did a fantastic job. Mad props!

[nigrum homonculus]

heh? for real? i thought this was pretty standard lol. but thanks for that! thanks for reading!

[That_Girl]

Yes for real. It was honest but not overly done. Not melodramatic. :) You did a good job hun.

[Baby Ricochet]

GOod poem. "Marking up the days on the fleshy walls of his brain." I like that. Bullies often don't realize the psychological torment they're creating. It can come as a surprise to a bully when he torments a kid one day then makes buddy's with the kid the next why the kid doesn't trust him. I know that sounds strange but it's the truth. A bully's aggressive behavior is "here and now" oriented and it can fly out of his head as fast as it flew into it.

[nigrum homonculus]

oh yeah i know too well. i'm friends with some of the guys who used to push me around. they did exactly what you said. they were dumbfounded at the fact i was shook of them. in some cases now, they are scared me. i don't like that at all. thanks for your review man. really appreciate your thoughts on this.

[Allycat]

wow this poem really hits home for me. It's a truly wonderful piece, I low how you ended it. Excellent write, thank you for sharing :)

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks ally! surprised but glad you could relate to it. thank you for reading!

[Allycat]

no problemo Phil :D