Blazing Fireworks

A poem I wrote for Poetry and Lyrical Challenge group

Blazing colors illuminate the night sky;
Thunderous booms disturb the silence.
Squawking birds begin to scatter and fly.

Vibrant hues of every beautiful shade;
Splash against the blacken velvet scene;
Silently, the show is over and begins to fade.

Smoke circles filling the stagnant cool air;
As oxygen rushes from healthy lungs
The heart descends, for he is no longer there.

Dreams how deceitfully convincing they can be;
For love once blazing with color and fire,
Has escaped, showing the past, and leaving reality.

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

All those fireworks, all that colours .. just as love can be described .. great metaphor there .. sad the ending, memories maybe not as colourful as the could be.

A lovely but sad poem, beautifully written .. 'Vibrant hues of every beautiful shade; Splash against the blacken velvet scene; Silently, the show is over and begins to fade.'

[The Water Queen]

Okay so I..... Loved this poem. I loved the imagery and the way you show us the Fireworks with your words and flow. This poem is simply art in poetry. This is my fave stanza:
"Dreams how deceitfully convincing they can be;
For love once blazing with color and fire,
Has escaped, showing the past, and leaving reality."

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem was amazing. The description made the fireworks come alive. I like the wisdom in the last lines. The days gone should leave us and the reality of life come back too quickly to face us again. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Jenny Nelson]

A great comparison. It really conveys the feeling of an ending of something magnificent. Your description is great!

[Sam Severn]

I'm in love with the line "Splash against the blacken velvet scene"....You've colored my imagination with the imagery in this poem! ㋡

[Taylor H.]

This was beautiful. The imagery was so good that I would still know it was fireworks even if you didn't tell me. Wonderful write!

[The Analog Kid]

I like it. The imagery and contrasts are nice. I would work on the meter:

"Vibrant hues of every beautiful shade;
Splash against the blacken velvet scene;
Silently, the show is over and begins to fade."

Just needs a slight tweak.

Pat