I only see you

this is a poem about seeing for the first time that special someone that shines above all the rest

I've never seen a soul

Gleaming in the light

 

That can match

Your eyes in darkness

 

They really are too bright

 

Yet I want to look

To stare into the sun

 

They've burned out of my head

Now you're the only one

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Japanese Cherry]

so sweet. wonderful job, i love this!

[Alexa Tasch]

So cute! Its very touching and made me smile. A great piece!

[Eryn ♪]

Short simple sweet what else is there to say

[Frieda P]

This is shiny, I really like it. Made me smile, that's always a good thing. :-)

Corrections, 'too' and 'you're'......

[Heromen Selena]

Just one thing minor, the "to" needs to be "too". Other than that this is so sweet. It's a great short poem. Love it :)

[Aehr]

touching. i like the meaning. short poemns can speak so much too :)

[de_maruf]

hi emily,
i think i got the meaning you tried but not well expressed

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hii Emily, very simple in structure and scant in content but effective.

[Tex]

ahhh. a very sweet and touching piece. very clean and bright. Lovely.

[Shaylynn H.]

Too* bright.

Not bad though.
Steady flow.