A New World

I created this because I am a recent member to this website, so I decided to link that "newness" in a story. It doesn't make any sense at all and it's a bit short, but I hope you enjoy it nonetheless.

I walked into the dome. It was made of ice, almost as tall as a skyscraper. The light outside tinted it into glowing colors that slowly changed like water reflecting on the bottom of a pool. The floor was white, pure white. It hurt my eyes to look at it, like looking into the sun. No matter how much they walked on it, it remained opaque and bright.

What kind of place is this? I thought to myself.

I saw nothing ahead of me, but I couldn't just remain where I was, so I walked forward. My boots clicked each time I stepped, and the echo could be heard from everywhere, clanging with the echo of others around me. I tried to walk the way they did, but it was impossible. They moved so smooth, it was inhuman looking. Their eyes just stared ahead, never turning or glancing. I wasn't too worried though, for they seemed to pay no attention to me.

Miles and miles it felt like. Nothing lay ahead and nothing remained behind. So what was I doing this for, what use would it be?

I saw something at that moment. It was miniscule, but it was not an illusion. A flash of color, a bit of jerking. It couldn't be one of their kind, for the way this object moved was too irregular compared to them. Was it a human? My feet continued to step, but the object didn't seem to appear any closer. Maybe it was an illusion.

A screech lingered in the air, and then all light went out.

A flash of color...

A jerk of movement...

And an opening to something new.

Author's Note

How is the structure?
Grammar
Should I word some things differently?

Reviews

[Simone]

this is great! you have me wanting to see what else is gonna happen.

[Pritesh]

It was excellent i am wating for more

[Brittany]

This was...interesting. I think you did a nice job of description. I hope you write more. I'm thinking maybe this could be a prologue to a story. An adventure or quest. I don't know. Think about it.

[Dean Kuch®]

Uh, the story made perfect sense to me. Does that mean that somethings very, VERY wrong with me?
Good structure, good grammar, and neat little read. What more could anyone ask for?