Anguish

Deep pain of loneliness without someone special

Clouds cover the whole sky, shows dark night
Birds sit in their nest, can't try to flight
Anywhere moon not seen, put off its light

On stair I sit, hand under my head
Tears fall from eyes, gaze roses red
I stumble in my life, still unwed

Her picture in my hands, her face bring out me
On bed of thorns I live, without her feel wee
I stare her picture, and mumble where thee?

I wallow in the mire, life full with ruin jerk
I don't swallow pain of lonely, don't do any work
I mis wailing without her, time seems like mirk

when she'as on the brink of grave, i never forget that time
Stare into my eyes with keen interest, she waive body at all times

Author's Note

If any mistake related to Grammar then please help to correct it.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This was really beautiful, i could tell it was written straight from your heart.
It was sad and very romantic.
Very emotional and heartfelt this piece.
this was my favorite part
On stair I sit, hand under my head
Tears fall from eyes, gaze roses red
I stumble in my life, still unwed

The rhyming was also amazing :)
I really enjoyed reading this :) Keep writing i like the way you write :)

[Savior knowmore]

very good, but it'd be even better if you did a spell check on it. Its easily fixed, so no harm done.

[Pradnya]

wow !!!!!!! i loved this poem , full of emotions and expressed nicely, thanks for sharing such a wonderful work

This was excellent~ thank you for pointing out your work to me. F~

[Vinod Kumar U K]

nice secunce and situation created for the reviewing of lost love, and the background also deeply tied the sentiments... Very good poem..

[Becky C Strukamp]

I like this poem. Some grammatical errors but a lovely poem.

[msharma]

You have thoughts that can be said to giving you the potential to write,well used imagery.Keep writing.

[Scoxander]

I can see where you're trying to go with this, it doesn't read very well due to the grammatical inconsistencies but you have potential. My advice, really work on your English

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice write. The rhythm could use a little tweaking but other than that it reads very well..xx

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

So much pain and saddness potrayed in this poem! Excellent writing!