Anguish

Deep pain of loneliness without someone special

Clouds cover the whole sky, shows dark night
Birds sit in their nest, can't try to flight
Anywhere moon not seen, put off its light

On stair I sit, hand under my head
Tears fall from eyes, gaze roses red
I stumble in my life, still unwed

Her picture in my hands, her face bring out me
On bed of thorns I live, without her feel wee
I stare her picture, and mumble where thee?

I wallow in the mire, life full with ruin jerk
I don't swallow pain of lonely, don't do any work
I mis wailing without her, time seems like mirk

when she'as on the brink of grave, i never forget that time
Stare into my eyes with keen interest, she waive body at all times

Author's Note

If any mistake related to Grammar then please help to correct it.

Reviews

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

This was really beautiful, i could tell it was written straight from your heart.
It was sad and very romantic.
Very emotional and heartfelt this piece.
this was my favorite part
On stair I sit, hand under my head
Tears fall from eyes, gaze roses red
I stumble in my life, still unwed

The rhyming was also amazing :)
I really enjoyed reading this :) Keep writing i like the way you write :)

[futurepast.]

A deep and emotional write with words of despair and pain .. thank you for sharing. Blessed be :)

[Sakib]

This is great. You have shown the images quite beautifully. I liked the use of words and flow of the poem. I can relate to it. Great job.

[Sunni Davis]

Very emotional. I Feel the pain and sorrow in your words.

[Daytonight]

A very poignant poem but difficult to understand in some parts. Keep on penning.

[Anita]

This was a very nice poem. It does have some grammar mistakes but somehow it adds to the beauty of this piece. Well done!

[Legacy]

Gobinder Singh 'Bardwal',

Quite honestly, your poem has full body, every symmetrical detail that a poem should have.

Yes, being not from America - your natural tongue is expected, in my opinion, you have a grasp on English language that surpasses a lot of Americans. Not to mention, speaking in depth is difficult for most to grasp!

Congratulations, you know the foundation, the detail, the form and style as well as the genre in which you perform. This was an excellent start for a writer who can only grow from here.

Great job and keep writing,

Legacy

[habiba]

wOnderfUl begain...lOve the way U say the picture U see xD...the wOrds maybe isn't that strOng...bUt the lyricS are perfect xD..lOve it

[Amila Jay]

Really nice poem!!!!

[coreygossett]

This was absolutely incredible. I loved the line "I dont swallow pain of lonely, dont do any work."

[Summer Windton]

This poem is so beautiful, it touched me greatly. Few poems stick out to me like this one did. I love it.
Continue the good work. God bless.