I must say that I honestly did not like this. It just made me feel bad. Maybe that was your intent. I am not put off by a rant or dark poetry, but usually I feel something behind the work left unsaid or a point that is made to effect change. I may have misse the point here. Even the style and the thinking process felt all "out of joint" to me. Sorry to be less than enthusiastic. I'm glad your psyched to write and keep writing as others may love this work. I will always be honest with my reviews though. So you can believe the positive reviews I write...
BTW, I care enough to write an honest review and you care enough to write and post your poetry... We do care. We cannot help but to care. It is in our DNA. It is what separates us from animals. :-)
Be well.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
you have a point which i will agree with but in Pakistan (my country) this is common and it is direc.. read moreyou have a point which i will agree with but in Pakistan (my country) this is common and it is directly based upon us, i do not know how things are in your country but i am writing from what i see and this was the thing that i saw last and got me seriously sad and thus i decided to write on it! Atiba and Hamza liked it, if i say so or just a guess on my side because this is also somewhat common in their Country!
And i do not mind because this is a place to share and if we keep our thoughts to ourself then their is no point to this site and thanks for the honest review. Honesty is the best policy! : )
the message in your sweet poem.that's what we humans need to adopt.and then we can be actually called Human.that's what humanity is made of....that love and care and solicitude are the purest element on earth........they are more precious than diamonds as they can help us gain anything.even captures the hearts of millions..really .this is a brilliant writing......just awesome!!111
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you for the wonderful review and we need to adopt to care, to help others not see them and lau.. read moreThank you for the wonderful review and we need to adopt to care, to help others not see them and laugh, Thank you for the review!
t think i know what this is related with ..
everybody cares but nobody shows it ... and this is where we lag behind ..
going against a super power won't do good to anyone, but if everyone stands then only can we stop all this ..
very impressive poem ... put this up everywhere .. and let the world know that we all care ..
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
yes .. my point exactly, they take it disrespect to themselves to care for others!!
repeating it twice i made it a bit heavier .. dont u think ?? .. i think that is good for a poem .. .. read morerepeating it twice i made it a bit heavier .. dont u think ?? .. i think that is good for a poem .. wont u say ?
11 Years Ago
Every one has different views. Maybe you viewed it from a perspective much different from mine. I ho.. read moreEvery one has different views. Maybe you viewed it from a perspective much different from mine. I honestly felt that it sounded strange. But as you say it made the poetry heavier, it's fine.
this i found to be so true, oh, and I like the way you worded it simply, with some parallel structure, but also said what you needed to say. Also, i think those 2 exclamation marks at the end are kind of your trademark now.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you and those exclamation mark might just be!!