B******s of God

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B******s of God

i was born this way. 

"You may plagiarize Me if you please." 

He said ... while

all of mankind saying: "but

              liters of rain are dropping               

turtle-like green shells ............

                      mapping breaches.

the breaches have made us  so

You  reigning

                       Your rain dropping

whole, quarter, half and whole dropping on all

plagiarize me green

green and sprouting shoots ... sprout and shoot ......."

                                              Then the

                                                           troubles 

                                                                             came.

with water

smooth grinding pebble stone all pretty in fall colors

racked in slings  ... quarter water a drop

begins admission

                                contrition

waking beached craft; whole whales

                                               drafting  excuses 

b******s of God

witches okra .... sly wicked smoke to hide in   (again He says)                                    

"Plagiarize Me                                                     

                          if you please

when I say

                             Let it be and

Come to Me"

E. 

4/29/16

Author's Note

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

There is amazing power in your words. Plagiarizing the green of the earth and all things we were taught....copying what we have seen and yet not making it quite the way it was intended. Of course, in order to really "get" what you are saying, a person must believe in what religion has taught. Not sure I have ever bought into it all....and yet the intensity with which you wrote this makes me sit up and take notice. A unique write to say the very least. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you Lydi! very very much ... yes believing is important ..i suspect the beliefs of an atheist would not have a light to turn on in the darkness ..but an agnostic might .. i think the common threads of the major religions would allow for understanding ..however, in my limited reading , only one offers an answer to our inability to fulfill any of the religions rules or paths ;) i take your comments to heart and tell you again that i really appreciate them!
E.

[V]

I think this is a very rich poem when it comes to word choice and use, heavily powerful but not too much, leaves the reader thinking but also sort of mind blown at the same time. The structure is interesting to follow, it's like getting lost and finding oneself again in strange yet fascinating places.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you very much Vanessa! i find your review quite remarkable .. could not feel more happy with the impressions you draw ..thank you very much for taking time
E.

[V]

You're welcome. I enjoyed reading.

[Dara]

Your spirituality shines here. The mystery behind God's handiwork never ceases to amaze me. The more I see the less I know. His wisdom is endless and best to leave him in control. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Einstein Noodle]

and thank you Dara ..for you insightful and sensitive reading of this one ... it blesses me to read your praises of God in your response ... knowing our place in the scheme of things takes a tremendous weight from one's shoulders eh!? just love your words..thank you again my friend!
E.

[Alfred Kukitz]

Perhaps the American Indian knew before he realized his way of life, his way of thinking seemed to encompass the totality of an ecological mind.

A bit confusing but I get it!

Regards,
Al

[Einstein Noodle]

perhaps ... even science attempts to find the connection of all things ... they just fall short not being able to say "God" ..or Creator :) thank you for your honest review ...and for taking the time to share it !
E.

[Tomás Ó C..]

When man tries to say he knows God... We have trouble. Story of the world's history...

[Einstein Noodle]

yes! and thanks for stopping by my friend ... we join a group and concoct a mixture made to be sustenance but the more we beat it the more like rock it becomes ...i think our Creator is much more fluid than that ...i agree with you ...its when we acknowledge our need and doing so without understanding that mustard seed faith can begin to enrich our lives ;)
E.

[boblakin]

'Then the troubles came.'

Nah, the trouble started when God decided perfection might be rather boring to watch.

Nice one E.

biblakin.

[Einstein Noodle]

you have a cheeky sense of humor "biblakin" :) do you suppose that blame will be sifted out some day?
I do :))
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

ps. i am gratified you picked that particular line out ..it comes from my Irish heritage and it is close to me little ol' heart :) if you like ...check this link! https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Troubles
My great grandfather was the "immigrant" that brought our family to the USA from County Donegal in Northern Ireland ... sorry to get off the subject of me poem a bit ;)

[Matching Socks]

I see this as a challenge to world to rebuild in the image of God and all he intended. This world he created, that we have destroyed, we need to copy his plans and intentions to recreate in the intended form.

[Einstein Noodle]

and what an impossible challenge eh!? :) who can stand before ..who can dare to utter the name and intent of God? ... let alone re-define .... oh my my my my! God is God! :))) thank you so much for your review ..it inspires me to tremble ... with a healthy fear of our Creator ... if only we would strive to copy the Plans and Designs of God ... if we could only just ...."Be" ;) so grateful for your review ..thanks so much always Ana!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

my turtles have brown shells...wonder what they are hiding under there, or perhaps protecting...

we have our shells, we crawl through life slowly like the turtles...develop a hard shell from experience, but hope to find courage to live better lives, not corrupt ones...

and i like the idea of plagiarizing good actions...that is the one time we want to plagiarize....although at times when i read your work...i think about wanting to do it.

so deep you are...and mind really goes on a journey...

j.

[Einstein Noodle]

am deeply gratified and humbled by your remarks jacob erin-cilberto ... thank you very much for all your visits and sensitive attentive reading of my stuff ... we are all human as you say ... you put a big satisfied smile across my face but if you plagerize me you must do both good and bad ;)))
E.

[andrew mitchell]

wherever there is mankind you can bet some form of corruption lies beneath the layers of man's achievements. Just nature is less forgiving. Einstein Einstein !!!!! You always deliver! excellent poetry

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you my good friend ... thank you for that friendship .. love your pointing out the unforgiveness of nature ... she is also quite indiscriminate isn't she ;)
E.

[anne]

all of mankind saying: "but
liters of rain are dropping
turtle-like green shells ...
mapping breaches.
such a strong message in powerful lines.... :))

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much Anne ... for your very encouraging review ... really happy the turtles spoke to you ;)))
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

Great song and amazing poetry. I liked the directness of the words. Had a honest feel to your thoughts and reasons. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Einstein Noodle]

Coyote Man! i am always so happy for your visits and reviews ... i am so pleased that you see that directness ... thanks again man!
E.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.