Fireflies

Fireflies

Curious she stands in tall grass with bare toes,

she glances back to see her life, 

it is then that she knows.

Her pale hands glide across the emerald sea,

tiny flecks of light dance for her,

spinning, tumbling, playfully.

Walking, then floating in a place of splendid things.

Unafraid she goes comforted,

by the humming of a million delicate wings.

Her mortal dance completed,

the last note vibrates of her song,

but here in this place she knows,

her spirit continues on.

Knowing in life she found comfort,

beneath the darkest of skies,

she is granted wings of an angel,

and an eternity of dancing with fireflies.

Rainee

Reviews

[KTizzle]

I loved this. I loved the first line, particularly standing on grass with bare toes. It makes me think of Song of Myself by Walt Whitman when he asks What is Grass? The symbolism behind grass is interesting as it can range from capturing a childlike tone to expressing a sense of humanity. People are born into the earth and descend into it. We come into the world "bare" and naked and leave it "bare" and naked. I love that get a lot from the very first line.

The second stanza takes me on a flight into the sky. I like that you described the sea as emerald. The color emerald captures maturity as well as spirituality.

I thought the next stanza was too frank, but then as I kept reading I grew to appreciate the strength behind those first two lines when you say, "unafraid she goes comforted." I especially love the following line.

I loved the next stanza about a "mortal dance" and continuing it with a "song." Fireflies have a way of giving off light unique to them so I thought the ending was perfect.

I loved the imagery and got a morbid poem that is dreamy and lovely. Going in my library.

Thanks for posting! Have a great day!

[Parker101]

It's beautiful I love it I could actually see what was going on.Your good at this so I think you should stick with it even when it gets hard I'm not the beast writer but this.. this was good:)

[Echoes of Eros]

Your words, they are so beautifully painful. In the summers here, how the firefly light looks like stars dancing in the meadows. You've created this enchantment, the mortal world melting into the divine everlasting. xo

[Giulia King]

a very lovely poem. Magical

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Nice read for those of us who are indeed curious about nature and intend on finding its many hidden secrets. I love the composition ☺

[Wondering Mind]

The hook for me was the title; fireflies have always amazed me.
Now to your poetic expression... Lovely

[Anindita Janhabee]

This seems full of nature and it's complete sense towards that beauty and praise of the dark night... the fireflies cast a new beauty and role here making it sound so eternal and peaceful....
nice one!!!

[Nwang]

This is wonderful. Loved it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Right now the only word I have is WOW... not sure what I can say that would do justice to this poems greatness. WOW!!

[Rainee Whiting]

WOW! THANK YOU!! :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are most welcome.

[Ted Kniffen]

Very well done, Rainee. A lovely poem describing an end time. May we all dance with fireflies in this lifetime before we start the next adventure. Good write.