Omnes Mea Culpa

Omnes Mea Culpa

A Poem by Rhea752
"

love, can be the most painful emotion or the most blissful and it's all up to the partners

"

one year two

How many will I lose?

Before you construe

My love is not a ruse  

 

 

The tears well up

Like unspoken pleas

They just buildup

Until they’re set free

 

 

To you they’re not

Real

My heart starts to rot

Neglect of love feels…..

 

Hurt rocks my body

Nobody knows  

It feels like lunacy  

It grows

 

 

Inside of me

Twisted and gnarled

Just like a tree 

My words garbled

 

 

No chance of

Understanding 

Words lost whereof

I am needing   

 

 

Lost in oblivion

Omnes mea culpa  

Lost to all reason

Omnes mea culpa! 

© 2012 Rhea752


Author's Note

Rhea752
Omnes mea culpa means all my fault in in Latin

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The only thing that I would change is the Latin. You put "Omnino mea culpa" as the way to say "All my fault" but "omnino" is not a real Latin word. The word for "all" is "omnes" in the nominative singular. The correct translation would be "Omnes mea culpa est", which means "All is my fault", or, if you didn't care for formality, you could drop the "est" and say "omnes mea culpa".
The poem itself is great though. Each short stanza was seemed to hold its own emotions but they all conveyed that feeling of guilt and self-requital. Your latin was very close; most people wouldn't have noticed the mistake, and those who did would still be able to understand the meaning behind the words. I love the idea of using multiple languages in poems, it makes them seems more exotic. Thank you.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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lost to all reason" powerful, mind expanding dilemma to interpret as the
reader sees fit in light of runderstanding the world, outstanding

Posted 8 Years Ago


The use of forgeign language in a piece can either accent it nicely or just make it sound like gibberish. Your use of the one phrase in the dramatic ending is very nice. Even if you hadn't translated the phrase in your author's notes I would have loved it all the same. Brava!
~The Wilted Rose

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I could hear this as a song

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good job! I really like this, and the use of Latin. Brava!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the use of latin in the poem, though you may want to work on adding in punctuation to help with the flow of the poem and understanding. This is amazing and I love the different verbs you used in the poem. Great job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This reminds me of a song that I used to hear almost everyday. Nice poem, I love it :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The only thing that I would change is the Latin. You put "Omnino mea culpa" as the way to say "All my fault" but "omnino" is not a real Latin word. The word for "all" is "omnes" in the nominative singular. The correct translation would be "Omnes mea culpa est", which means "All is my fault", or, if you didn't care for formality, you could drop the "est" and say "omnes mea culpa".
The poem itself is great though. Each short stanza was seemed to hold its own emotions but they all conveyed that feeling of guilt and self-requital. Your latin was very close; most people wouldn't have noticed the mistake, and those who did would still be able to understand the meaning behind the words. I love the idea of using multiple languages in poems, it makes them seems more exotic. Thank you.

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

very nicely done, enjoyed the read.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love the language change! Keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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