i'll see you soon

i'll see you soon

A Poem by just take a breath

i dont know where you are

and i cant see you

but you cant be very far

somehow i feel you

 

my dreams shift around

believe me, i know

but as much as they want me to

i cant let you go

 

i cant wait to hear your voice

for our constant stares to linger

to dance to no noise

for our perfect picture

 

i cant wait for our kisses

and our stupid fights

i cant wait to hold hands

and to hold you at night

 

so ill just sit here and wait

wish every night and day

and one day it will happen

ill see you soon, ok?

© 2011 just take a breath


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A powerful poem. When we miss and need someone. Leave a yearning for the thing we can't feel and have. I like how you described your desire in the poem.
'i cant wait to hear your voice
for our constant stares to linger
to dance to no noise
for our perfect picture"
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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there's something so...captivating about the simplicity of this poem. Like that shy girl who hides in the crowd thinking that she can't be seen yet somehow she's the one person that everyone notices

Posted 9 Years Ago


Ah, the longing for that one special person. Your heart aches to be with them. I was young and in love once and it made me crazy; not insanely crazy, just emotionally crazy. It's hard to explain, and no one around seems to understand what you're going through. Falling in love; it's one of the many joys of growing up.
Have a great life.


Posted 9 Years Ago


Keeping a work simple and uncomplicated is NOT a bad thing. Keeping a focus in your sight as you walk your paths is also not a bad thing. Life gets too complicated - sometimes, and we can lose our focus and sense of what we are and want. And age is not a "Smart" pill... just a point of self-reflection.

I like your thoughts and wish you well.

Take care,
Chris

Posted 9 Years Ago


thats so wonderful, makes me think of all the things i've let go nad wishes i never had done.

so powerful, really moving, well done, again im loving the rhyming.

Posted 9 Years Ago


A wonderful and imaginative poem that a lot of people can share and understand that sense of needing to be with their partner. Vivid and creative. Beautiful. Thanks for sharing

Posted 9 Years Ago


I can't even begin to explain how much i relate to this poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Although written with simplicity this is so touching and powerful. You've really written it well. It frames exactly how I feel when I'm in love! I could really relate to this! Well done :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


wow! how beautiful and full of sincerity. i too have felt like this as so many other people have as well. i love how each stanza is nicely written and flows nicely. powerful, heartfelt poem!

keep up the great work!
Manda

Posted 9 Years Ago


Great xxx

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is such a beautiful poem and the meaning behind it gives it so much power. Great job!

Posted 9 Years Ago



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about me? im 15, im a girl, im blond, and tend to take my feelings out through music and writing. if you knew me, you would know non-believers drive me insane! this includes people that say "your t.. more..

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