Dear love

Dear love

A Poem by just take a breath

here I'm standing by your grave
with a letter in my hands
to which i state my lifeless words
turned to smoke from this ruthless shock

my words are choked
tears flutter down my cheeks
but i keep going
i keep trying to breath

I'm calm,
for fear that i might break
realization hits me
that it is your life god decided to take

Dear love,
take care in heaven
for i know that's where you'll be

Dear love,
don't you ever forget
how much you mean to me

Dear love,
take my lips with you
and keep every kiss

Dear love,
its so hard
to know how much you're missed

Dear love,
count every day without me
and turn them into good

Dear love,
i never showed how much i loved you
as much as i knew i should


© 2011 just take a breath


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wow its sad and i can relate to it which then in turn means i have felt the way you did when you wrote this . . . the flow was nice and repetition was good

Posted 9 Years Ago


this is so sad. I can relate to your sense of regret about the extent to which you demonstrated your love, but I do believe that it is ultimately felt and known in the hearts of those we love

Posted 9 Years Ago


This has a really nice flow - I really like the "Dear love" repetition. Very emotional, and very touching - a lovely write :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is a beautiful piece of writing. It was flawless and it flowed perfectly. Losing someone you love is always hard but it helps to know they are in heaven being watched over by God.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Great structure and repetition - this really compels the reader to go on, remembering. Nice one!

Posted 9 Years Ago


awwwwwwwwwwww so sad!

Posted 9 Years Ago


"my words are choked
tears flutter down my cheeks
but i keep going
i keep trying to breath"

a heartfelt poem...death is not always easy...i can almost say that it was a passionate poem! wonderful work!



Posted 9 Years Ago


Sad work, but beautiful to see that one person could bring
another so much joy.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Good one..!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


sorrow drips from every stanza...was it something that actually happened? very convincing!

Posted 9 Years Ago



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