A strange love

A man falls in love, this is based on some true experiences.

                             A strange love

“God used to make beautiful girls till the year 1985, and after that god suddenly stopped.Probably the warehouse where the beautiful girls were made, was burnt down by Satan or God decided that the earth deserves no more angelic girls, as the world is filled with countless sins “Said Dewy.

Dewy was a man who never was among the staunch believers of love, but today according to him, he had seen the most beautiful woman. But there was a slight glitch, the girl whom he saw, was five years elder to him, it made the whole scenario a bit too twisted. However, he was with his friend Hilario, Hilario on the other hand was a romantic by heart. Romance and chivalry flowed in his veins; any lady who had the “opportunity” to meet him would certainly get drowned in his charm. But it wasn’t like Dewy never got his share of females; he was also good at his game. But he was more cold-blooded, he never meant what he told, he said “I love you” every alternate day only to entice women to go out with him, he was heartless but he always got what he demanded.

So you must be wondering” Why is Dewy facing such a dilemma?” he could have easily got this beautiful women ,he was talking about and done his regular routine. Dewy had his share of elder women, and he had learned one thing from those past experiences, they all want to end up marrying you, and when they decide they want to marry you, only the Almighty can save you from this catastrophe. Dewy learned it the hard way, and thus today he  again was complaining to Hilario about his helpless state with this woman, and Hilario like a good friend was listening and trying to put some essential reasoning into Dewy’s head.

“God used to make beautiful girls till the year 1985, and after that god suddenly paused. After that only pretty girls have been born. “Said Dewy. Hilario was a bit offended by such chauvinist remarks, but Hilario had never seen Dewy in such a sorry state, probably Dewy was maturing, a new venture into adulthood for Dewy.

Hilario retorted back “Of course not, this very thought is atrocious, my fiancée is 1988 born and she is beautiful”. Dewy shrugged his shoulder and said” As you say!”This statement angered Hilario, rather this attitude of Dewy made him furious, he loved his fiancée and he was not ready to take any criticism about her, whomsoever. He brought his chair closer to Dewy’s menacingly and said “You better make this discussion clear to me or else you will lose the position of best man from my wedding”. Dewy raised his eyebrow in amazement, and he told “I never meant to hurt you or your feelings; I am just saying that Laura is not as beautiful as the female I saw, that’s all. Laura (Hilarious fiancée) is good but this female was like a lotus in the muddy pond.”

Hilario knew that arguing with Dewy was just a meaningless chore altogether and he practically never gained any benefits from arguing with him, but Hilario was just a bit curious about the girl, he asked “Please could you enlighten me, by describing your proclaimed angel”.

“I have heard many fables about men saving their lady love, I never believed in them, till today. I have often told you that the girl I am going to marry will be so beautiful that her radiating beauty will compel you to wear sun glasses, I only thought of that in my dreams, until I met that girl. Her voice was so enchanting that even a deaf man could experience the melody of her voice, her lips were so red that the roses will appear a shade lighter, her eyes more innocent than a baby’s eyes, and her skin so soft….” Hilario interrupted “so you touched her?”Dewy said in a menacing tone “Next time you break the flow, god is my witness that I will kill you, and whether I touched her or not? you will never know”. Dewy continued “Her skin as soft as velvet, her face as radiant as the moon, her figure carved out by the god themselves”. And there was a numbing silence, Dewy poured rum into his glass and went into a pensive state for a long time. Hilario didn’t seem to mind it.

Hilario after a long time broke the silence and said “It seems that you have fallen in love”. Dewy said “whatever that feeling was, if that was love then I am addicted to it”. Hilario smiled at his words.

After a short pause Dewy then said” I was wondering about the idea I presented to you some time ago, about how God had stopped making beautiful girls after the year 1985”.”Yes, what about it?”Said Hilario.”I have come with a queer list, but it’s just an insight” said Dewy then he continued shamelessly “after year 1985 to the year 1989 God made tall girls with wider hips and small breasts, then after 1989 to 1992, God increased the size of the breast, probably because of the complaints from his worshipers but to compensate on the breast size God decreased the size of the brain, no one complained after that.”

Hilario laughed and told Dewy,” You are the limit”.

Author's Note

Please keep an open mind and a broader perspective when you read the story. The story comes from a real life incident of mine, where I had met a girl, who nearly matched the description as above.lol

Reviews

[Crowley]

I love the thought that God stopped making beautiful women after 1985, agree or not is a great hook to hang a story of chauvinism on, although I am not sure that chauvinism is the correct word for it. I love the characters and the story line, although I would like to see it fleshed out a bit and add more of the actions and surroundings of the characters to warm the piece into a full picture. The touches like the rum and the chairs are good and add flavor to the scene, and the scene is good and worthy of a slower pace and would make a fantastic construction project. I love the line about Best Man status being in jeopardy if his answers aren't meaningful and true....I really liked the feel of this, great job.

[E.H. Monroe]

great opener. Don't tell us he's heartless, my balls cringe when I'm told something in a book. The actions are where the heart is. Leads on like a joke which had me continuing. This would fit in a longer piece with some expanded s**t around it.
Hilario's name is a nice play on words.
and the end...well the end is just f*****g true.
love me some truth. ho ho.

[futurepast.]

This write shows the change from the old Dewy to the new Dewy. We can sense that he has matured over time, or because of that particular woman. The story is beautiful and I really wish it was longer. You are amazing with descriptions, and I loved how you inserted funny lines in between serious ones, thus breaking the atmosphere. The whole of it flashed into my mind like a movie, and it was awesome. You drew your characters in such a way that I totally understood them. And I think Hilario is right to some point when he says you have fallen in love... your description of the woman says it all ... A clever piece.

[Brian W. Hastings]

A very believable scene. I'm not surprised to find out afterward that it was based on an actual experience of yours. Keep using that trick. It is definitely a talent you excel at.

[Lovely Lady]

Great write! Keep writing.
~lovely

[Invisible Ink]

It's a good and interesting beginning for a story... it has some strong parts and weaker parts, Crowley pointed out some of those, so I think with some revisions it could turn into a very nice piece... the conflict isn't really strong... at least in our culture, 5 years is nothing, or it Dewey just conflicted because he doesn't believe in love? It's a little confusing. Short stories are really difficult to write, I've never written a successful one myself. They need to be very powerful, clear & concise. I don't think the moral is "men will be men", it that what you are trying to communicate? I think you need to know first what you are really trying to get across. As I said, there are some good things here.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

I chuckled down the page with every line having learned years back that we are slaves to our biology and cerebral wiring despite how advanced we like to think ourselves~ men will always be men and women will always b***h about them~ lol!~~ you're right I enjoyed this thoroughly~

[Liza]

lol - it is always ironic to me when Men and God are put in the same sentence while putting down women....the reality is; women need to be beautiful so the man can turn out somewhat good looking or be turned on by that woman...anyways - women will never win when men have so many visual needs and every man has a mother...will they dare call their own mother - ugly?