But Maybe

I don't want to go outside

But maybe

The sun will make me happy again

I don't want to help myself

But maybe

I deserve more than this pain

I can't stand to see your face

But maybe

Seeing you will make me stronger

I can't stand you next to me

But maybe

I'll remember why we no longer share a bed 

I won't let you tear me down

But maybe

You will be the reason I fight so hard

I still let you break my heart

But maybe

It will remind me of why I'm damaged

Reviews

[JayceeC]

This was strong except for one stanza and I'm not sure it sounds like what you meant.
I can't stand you next to me
But maybe
I'll remember why we no longer share a bed

If you are shunning a person so completely are you really likely to forget why you aren't sharing a bed?
Maybe change this to "Ill forget why we no longer share a bed." That is actually a bit more healthy point of view. forget and move on.
~Jan

[samanthaashley_]

thanks for the feedback. I guess what I was thinking was that sometimes I forget the reasons that someone has hurt me until I am physically with them. I like to live in this little fantasy world that everything was perfect, and I don't know why we don't talk anymore.. like I am missing out on something.

[andrew mitchell]

I enjoyed the emotions and the easy reading defining your reasoning and how you are confronting your issues

[Riley Justine]

Awesome poem, Samantha.
The format makes it an easy read and it works together really well

[Zac]

This is a great poem,
these words are all true.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and true words in the poetry.
"I still let you break my heart
But maybe
It will remind me of why I'm damaged"
Sometimes we can't stop the want and need of love even when we know. Can be a bad ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[dan]

Samantha, I like the way each three-line segment seems to be rationalizing your behavior in a spot of self-analysis. Then you progress toward the end and each new self-realization reaches for the conclusion, in which you remember the reason you are into such deep analysis...a broken heart, a damaged spirit. This poem can be read word for word and taken as being straightforward, but when putting all of the pieces together the reader realizes that there are many deep (unsaid) feelings below the surface, a pattern of hurt. An excellent write! take care...dan

[fattycbreezy52]

Wow.Such a hard-hitting portrayal of the inner conflict.Amazing approach to modernity.Very good:)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

hey Samantha,
i have caught the main culprit................"maybe"
no thanks required

beautiful poem.......profound..........
i loved it!!!
:)

[nazia]

This maybe is what keeps us alive, fighting to get better that we have and helps us move on. Very nicely done :)

[Ana B.]

Very intense and deep meaning has it, stunning poem :)