My guardian angel

 

V1

You used to tell me story's that I like to hear

You used to listen to me even when you are not hear

chorus:

How could you leave me and go away

Without saying good bay

Don’t you know I'll miss, and cry a lot at night

I miss you, I miss you

V2

You used to tell me to be self depended

But I can't do it on my own

Not when you are not hear

No, no, no

chorus:

How could you leave me and go away

Without saying good bay

Don’t you know I'll miss, and cry a lot at night

I miss you, I miss you

 

Hook:

I cry a lot at night

Cause you are not bay my side

How could you run away

And leave me alone behind

How am I going to survive

Without feeling alive

i miss you

Author's Note

one of my first poems asong you can say ^_^

Reviews

[Richard Man]

Minor corrections of words that sound the same but mean different things: Hear...no...Here ...yes
Story's...no.... stories.. yes
Good bay...no...goodbye..yes
and finally
self depended.... independent.
As long as you are missing your guardian angel you are alive and there is hope!

[Cara]

thank you sir

[WingsToFly]

Nice one

[Cara]

thank you

[quinfinn]

this actually works very well as a song and would also stand alone as a poem. a couple of minor spelling issues, but they won't hinder the value of the work. very nicely done!

[Cara]

thank you, actually i remembred this one by reading your poem

[quinfinn]

awesome! glad i inspired you, sincerely.

[DrD]

Emotional and filled with longing. Expressive to the point that we believe it. Well done.

[Cara]

thank you sir

[Salar Majak]

great one sis, this ismy favourite

[Cara]

thank you