a land that will never die

i wrote this for a contest here called " TOVLI' 'TEN' ~" The following 10" ~" so i hope you like it.

under our hometown beautiful moon light i sat thinking about the old turnpike and how there was a flyover on it which took us, anywhere we wanted but now everything is gone they took it and put some constructions on they say it's a juncture of evolution but i say this juncture is confusing without knowing they destroyed an old land that there people spent there mornings walking by the sea on the sand they took it from us without a declare and told us to to watch with nothing to say but you know what, no one cares what they say we will fight till we get it back along with old days because love never dies that easy, and we wont give it all away this precious land is ours, not theirs to take anyway

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and good words.
"we will fight till we get it back along with old days
because love never dies that easy, and we wont give it all away
this precious land is ours, not theirs to take anyway"
Never give-up or accept bad answers. I liked the poem. Hold great meaning and open the door to a long talk. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Cara]

thank you, giving up on anything means that it was never yours, or it never should've been yours,or so i think
thank you for reading XD

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Kael Islingr]

good imagary, work on grammar and structure

[Cara]

thank you ^.^

[Tovli]

very nice. The flow of the poem was deliberate and matched the use of imagery, I thought. I like the blend of hopefulness and resolve with just a bit of nostalgia and anger. Tovli

[Cara]

thank you XD

[Helena]

Wonderful poem incorporating the "Ten"! Thank you for joining in the challenge Cara...

Helena :)

[Cara]

thank you XD