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You Lost Me

You Lost Me

A Poem by Sophie
"

inspired by Christina Aguilera's You Lost Me

"

Wandering alone amongst the trees

the branches drooping, rotting,

the color scheme consisting of black and dark green

my wounds drip blood, just clotting.


I sit on the earth,

and a puff of dust clouds

in this place, death, and the absence of mirth,

Miseries crowd.


I can't breath,

They're choking me.

My sobs rip from my throat,

I'm lost, all alone here, in this forest remote


I'm reminded of their warnings,

they said to tell you goodbye,

now, I won't see morning,

you've left me here to die.


My hair, once beautifully done,

is now scraggly and tangled.

My dress had begun

as perfect, now it is mangled.


My make up stains my face

but so does mud,

I will survive this place,

I will spill your blood.


Don't beg for me back,

after you sent me there,

I'm not going to give you anymore slack,

depression is not a fun affair.

© 2012 Sophie


Author's Note

Sophie
reviews please!
and if you haven't, please just read PLEASE! it's not even a sentence, long, and it'll take a second of your time, and will reward you with 3 reviews :D

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The description was direct and painful. I like the visions create by powerful statements.
"Don't beg for me back,
after you sent me there,
I'm not going to give you anymore slack,
depression is not a fun affair."
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Dark and well written; it leaves me wanting to know more. The only thing I might change would be to modify the last line in the fifth stanza. It seems a little choppy to me. Other than that, wonderful poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This was beautiful. (: I like the image it creates, and for me it gives off a dark vibe. Keep writing. :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


Awesome! I love it! I especially like the last part.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it! Especially since you got your inspiration from such a beautiful song :)
~The Wilted Rose

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The image it creates reminds me of a music video of Kelly Clarkson. I think it was Behind These Hazel Eyes or something like that. Good write, keep it up:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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