Amen

If I could do it all again,

Would I be able to say amen?

And if I did, how long would it be,

Before a blemish I did see?

Out of reach, parched with thirst, a water bucket swings between heaven and hell

Right or wrong, better or worst, desire and disappointment fill a bottomless well

In the blurr of eternity,

I can't see reality

A binary system leads to blame

In times plane, no values, no shame

In a battle between fear and valor, the victor carries a heavy load

At times too hard, we loose our footing and take the dark road

My balence lost

Guilt the cost

Memory's regrets

A jostled hornets nest

With his tools from birth and time on earth, each man does the best he can

Faults are found, on trodden ground, after his race is ran

God or devil is the test,

Both imprisoned in my chest

As I slide, down the hill of time

On this ride, speed increases as I decline

In the dance of dark and light

Will I stumble or hold on tight?

It's all a matter of timing with the tempo climbing

The secret is logic and emotions aligning

You can't dance a waltz to a tango

Flowers, planted in snow will never grow

The man that can see through eternities lies, no matter how wise

Will never be believed by society, but blamed for his impiety

With all this we must have the courage to stand

Totally naked before the eyes of the land

To extend to our neighbor a helping hand

And with all nature form an eternal band

Reviews

[willweb]

Perhaps our expectations are too high for what we face each day. Maybe we ask for too much when in the end it is not nearly enough. I believe your words should carry across the land, sunny or snow, dark or light, because every day is a new learning experience and your words need to be taught. Very well done my friend.

[Soren]

Thank you Will for the review and kind words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we can only run our best race...and even if we just finish, not win...we have tried...
do we have the courage to give life our best shot...
I have tried to dance a waltz to a tango....but my feet and heart got all tangled up.
j.

[Soren]

Thank you Jacob for the review and the comments which are most appreciated.

[John the Baptist]

This one seems to touch on many themes, such as spirituality, the nature of good and evil and a better way for humanity. The overriding theme may be that mankind always has a choice.

[Soren]

So right John there are several themes here and yes we always have an apparent choice. Thanks for the read and comments.

[JD Major]

"Memory's regrets
A jostled hornets nest"
We spend our present fighting demons of the past, hoping they won't define us,
all the time knowing we need to let them go ...and round and round we go.
...A potent, compelling, sobering and hopeful write, Soren!

[Soren]

Thanks JD for the review, and welcome cooments

[DIVYA]

Dear Soren,

With all good intentions, we as decent human beings often go wrong. We try to walk upright but often slip along dark, slippery paths. Indeed, on Judgement day, we'll stand totally naked with the good and bad in us. to be judged by God so we might as well start now. "In the blurr of eternity, I can't see reality," These words ring so true for us, as we are lost and confused by vastness of our universe and yet if we don't focus on the right things, we fail.

A poem of such powerful relevance in our troubled times.

[Soren]

Thank you divya for your insightful review and comments, they are deeply appreciated.

[DIVYA]

You are welcome, dear Soren.

[Chris Shaw]

You can’t dance a waltz to a tango
Flowers, planted in snow will never grow

Those two lines were exceptional in their meaning.

The whole poem touched me to my core. There is so much depth and pain here.

Wonderful final stanza Soren

A great piece of writing.

[Soren]

Thank you Chris for the review and such encouraging words.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to do Soren. But we must attempt.
"With all this we must have the courage to stand
Totally naked before the eyes of the land
To extend to our neighbor a helping hand
And with all nature form an eternal band"
The above lines. So strong, so honest. We will see few people real faces. I believe. I lost my face. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. I did enjoy.
Coyote

[Soren]

Thank you esteemed friend, so glad you enjoyed this one. Thank you for the read.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy Soren and you are welcome.