Love Under A Full Moon

Short Story :P

The moon was high in the sky
And there sat a boy and a girl
They were holding hands again
Kissing each other over and over
It seemed like everything was perfect
But during the next few hours
Terrible words were exchanged
She got up and ran into the woods
He cussed and tried to find her
Soon he saw her laying on the ground
She was passed out from exhaustion
Picking her up he took her home
Waking up a few hours later
Smiling when she saw him there
Then soon they started to kiss again
And everything else was forgotten.

By: Essentia

Author's Note

Just something I wanted to write. Hope you guys like it. It's just random and well does not make any sense.

Reviews

[lawrence bear]

short, but very nice. I like it :)

[VincentRayne]

To me this is genius at work here. The fact that only what happens is said leaves room for the mind to wander and imagine what happened. I can give very many ideas and even lead into its own story. I personally like it.

[Marlena]

Well...I like the idea behind it, but it would be a lot better if you put it into stanzas. That'd keep it organized, you know? Plus, if you went into WHAT was said, then we could feel more for the people in it, which would get the reader more into it and would make the piece more enjoyable. Good work so far, just fix it up a bit and it'll be perfect :)

[Harley Ann]

how sweet. this is like the story of my best friend's old relationship with the guy who is now her ex...anyway, they'd get in lots of fights but someone would do something sweet or something and they'd practically married. haha
this is really sweet. could be separated into stanzas, yes, but good either way :)

[HorrorMaster]

Yeah a short story indeed but it was good. :)

[J.S. Pua]

hmm..
this piece appears to me as a short story..
rather than a poem, i'm afraid..
but that's just me..

it's kind of nice though..
and sweet..
good write..

[Warick Ten Bohmer]

Nice poem, although it could be put into stanzas. Other than that I have nothing else to offer in the way of criticism.

Keep it up!!!
:)

[heich]

i liked it..its sweet..ahh..young love..i picture my bestfriend and his man..they are so like that..except the kissing part..lol

[salvador (camuel choisu..]

I love the story line with in it for it shows how a small accident can worry an angry mind.