into shape

4 years 6 months and 18 days left we shape and becomes shapeless

 

We are once in a perfect geometry at any point we are connected
our hearts runs into a vessel of love
continuously growing into Fibonacci’s equation
we dream too big, solving each angle, driven with our wants
as it intertwine between our own selves
we embrace in circles connecting our souls
as it finds epicenter through our radius
together it’s indefinite, yet notified as infinity
but might tremble into something, that we alone can solve

We are in a pentagon of different sides being watched over
being carefully divided. They have seen our emotions
though judgmentally disabled our connections
now the volume has set to its limit
we no longer grow out of our boxes
we have stop growing as natures stopped our body
from changing its’ size. The perimeter has been set
you have stopped the shape we slowly became water, shapeless looking for
others to reform our deformity

 And so we are points,
 points into lines into polygons and into perfect symmetry
but due to circumstances
lines are sometimes broken, and points are hidden,
therefore, we get attracted and applied the rules of third.
Just to fill up our own imbalances
but in hopes that one day we will again find our center
and once again we will connect our vertices

my dreams of you and me growing old together.

I hope.

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Math and love. Had to combine. You did.
"And so we are points,
points into lines into polygons and into perfect symmetry
but due to circumstances"
I liked how you use math and the language to create thoughts and possibilities. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Wem Ortiz]

thank you very much sir :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[dan]

Wem, To write a piece attaching human emotions and feelings to geometric principles must have been a tough undertaking, but you pull it off wonderfully. I always admire the writer who goes WAY into the woods, away from the beaten path, to come up with ideas so fresh and new. I could sit here 25 years and never think to write a piece making analysis of feelings analogous to mathematics. I give you a lot of credit, and I am saving this into my library favorites, so thank you for that. take care...dan

[DeerInHeadlights]

you have been able to put this together magically. I could never have the patience to even figure out all the mathematical language- and how all the words would fit together so well. You did a great job at making me envision geometry within a person and how we are so perfectly put together emotionally and mentally and how we are able to move things from one location to another as we seek balance..

[Wem Ortiz]

honestly I really hate math. Infact drop twice in every math major hahaha (can't believe I said that) so probably this is why I remember the lessons in math because of hating it and using the equations for a bittersweet poetry like this.

hoping I would pass math the second time around :D
suddenly I realize I can actually remember them hahaha man if only I know how to channel
hate in math back in the days. I could have passed all of it at first try.

but anyways I've been loving math so much that I really have to solve proportion and balances.
for Anatomy (i'm a fine arts major) :D

thank you for your heartwarming messages :)

each one of us here will find our own balance soon

[DeerInHeadlights]

that is funny, because I always look at things from a more scientific view point ( love anatomy and physiology).. you are welcome..

[Bear]

critique: (solving each angles, driven with our wants) it should be solving each angle, singular
(we have stop growing as natures stops our body) it should be we have stopped growing
(therefore we get attracted and applied the rules of third) you might want to place a comma after therefore to give a dramatic pause

Review: I really like the concept, there is a calculation for everything and you don't have to be a mathematician, flowers plus sad girl equals a smile on girls face :~) Well done, your English grammar is much improved. Standing Ovation! Clap! Clap!

[Wem Ortiz]

Yes! hehehe thank you! people like you who criticizes openly makes me feel i'm a grader, in a classroom with a very helpful teacher! :D thank a lot!

[Bear]

What can I say, once a teacher always a teacher and what is worse I taught poetry. I like to give critiques when I come across poems with real potential and all they need is a little tweaking. Plus I received help when I started writing so now I am paying back by helping others.

[3X3MPLER]

deep0and skillfully written.owesome

[Wem Ortiz]

thank you sir !

[annalysiar]

Wow so creative and so very very true. Very very nicely applied and done. I really like this. Beautifully done this poem has a great flow very good rhythm.

[Wem Ortiz]

thanks anna :)