If only you could

If only you could see

What you do to me

Your eyes are blinded by

To you what seams a lie

But what to me is real

is something you don't feel

My love is yours to hold

But to you my heart is cold

I'm wishing you could see

The love for you inside of me

To you I'm nothing but

Maybe some kind of nut

If only you could see

What you do to me

If only you could feel

To me what is real

If only you could see 

I am more than the 

The person you think me as

There is more than what has

Been of us, been of us

I'm hoping you can see

What's become of me

I'm more than what you know

So please just let me show

Who I truly am, truly am

If only you could see

What you do to me

Your eyes are blinded by

To you what seams a lie

Author's Note

This is a poem or could possibly be song lyrics not sure yet though, I wrote yesterday in about 15 minutes and haven't revised. Well let me know what you think. :)

Reviews

[AreWeBothCrazy]

I like how you started and ended it with the same rhyme, very well written :)

[YouoweYoupay]

Yes, it does sound like a song. *smiles* a rhyming, sad poem with self-concious emotions. Keep writing.

[KatiePie]

I think there are a lot of emotions in this. I loved reading it. Gorgeous write. :)

[Roger Ferguson II]

beautifully writen

[PaperHearts]

Nice write! It's funny that you mentioned that it could be a song, because when I was reading it, I actually thought to myself that it flowed perfectly to be the lyrics of a song. I really liked the concept behind this piece, as I felt that the emotions that you expressed are ones that everyone is able to relate to, and that everyone will no doubt feel at some point in their lives. Beautifully written,
~PaperHearts

[momo]

interesting wirte..very relateable and very good in capturing the feelings

[Brittni]

I definately see this as a song and I would love to hear it. It's very well written and I have to say I'm impressed by the fact that there are so many younger and talented writers out there and I think I can say you are one of them. Don't cap your creativity.

[Ashley]

i really like it! i like the way it flows, and i know the feeling

[My Fair Lady]

If only the one we are speaking to could hear our silent words. The pleading of our heart, that we cannot say aloud. Very nice.

*On a note... not sure if you really wanted to use the word seam.. instead of seem.