In Silence

In Silence

by

Jose M. Euvin

 

 

Sleeping in silence

Screaming inside

 

Wish you could hear me

So

I can open my eyes

 

The cups are filled

With tears I shed

 

Scream of depression

While lying in bed

 

The night is immense

And

Sour are the tears

 

The silence amends

The worst of my fears

 

Can one really live

When life is a dream

 

Can I really expect

For you to hear my screams

 

The heart's really silent

When there's nothing left

 

It's hard to feel anything

With the calling of death

 

Reviews

[Querida]

The sheer emotion in this piece is what strikes me as the most inviting. You can nearly feel and hear this girl as she screams for release. Your flow is amazing, if a teensy bilt stilted. Personally, I believe this enhances the read. How can one create amazing, smooth rhythms when life itself does not work that way?

I truly found beauty in this pice of art.

[H. A. M.]

I see when the darknes calls you you answer. This deep and depressingly entertaining. In a good way. Haunting is more like it. You kept the rhyme scheme and stayed on track with the topic.
Nicely done.

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

excellent write... very dark and compelling... keep up the good work.

[Tabetha Green]

It's beautiful! You captured some real hard emotions in the lines of the poem and I think it's very well written.

[Thallygal]

Well written....the pain comes through...are you really desperate??? keep writing

[Ladysue]

A hard emotional place, but you spoke it very well. This lines are very powerful and amplify as well conclude the piece perfectly.
The heart's really silent
When there's nothing left
It's hard to feel anything
With the calling of death

Very beautifully written.

[Spoken]

Greath rhythm and flow. I like the tone, intensly sad and painful. Your emotion shines through in your words. Well written.

[Mary E. Green]

Wow... strong words and just overall this piece is really good.

[Raven Wilson]

All I can say is wow, this poem really speaks...I like the style of it.

[Catala]

the rhyme and flow of this piece are well done, and the message is felt rather then heard... well done, I enjoyed this piece quite a bit

[TamiViolet]

Excellent flow and so.....real. The heart is silent when there's nothing left, but hopefully, one discovers a mere glimpse of light, granting the will to move on.