Nice. The flow and style almost remind me of a song, especially with the first stanza. There's a lot of emotion, but it's not raw, nor refined which gives a nice feel to most who read it. Over all this is a very nice romantic piece.
I like the write and the addition of the author's note. While many people might know what a Ritter is, besides a John Ritter, LOL, (may he rest in peace), there just as many or more who do not - so it's always nice to have some input from the author to help educate everyone, especially the young writers.
Even if I prefer angels than knights (my next post will show why), I like the poem.
The rythm is not that important, it's a very strong feeling that reaches me by reading this.
I like the fact that the poem does a good job of conveying the emotion of the narrator without being too straightforward. The poem suggests a situation, but its vague, leaving the reader to fill in the pieces and pick which version of the story they like best. Btw, what's a ritter?
Awww, I love poetry like this and hate it too, both emotions with raw passion! I always wanted someone to feel like that about me! I really like the structure of it. I love the fact that your poem here is short and therefore hits harder allowing the mind to wonder. I've yet to master the art of rhyme so respect to you. Yout poem is almost the poetry version of the book I'm writing at the moment. I think you should read the prologue to "The Story of "M"". I am much better at reviewing stories, if you have any I will read them for I am not a poet. I can sense the passion/pain in your words and it makes me empathise with the narrator. Good work bro!
If there be grief, then let it be but rain,
And this but silver grief for grieving's sake,
If these green woods be dreaming here to wake
Within my heart, if I should rouse again.
But I shall sleep, .. more..