Leaving Neverland

Leaving Neverland

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

The children flew out the window

Never to be seen

To a world full of adventures

And Wendy became their Queen

 

She told them marvelous stories

Told them fairytales

Spoke of Cinderella

Spoke of witches and spells

 

They soon forgot their parents

In this wondrous land

They care only for their leader

Better known as Peter Pan

 

A brave soul who knew no fear

A child without a past

Living where dreams are made of

A placed called Neverland

 

Fighting thief and pirates

Flying from cloud to cloud

With his fairy guardian

Tinkerbell by his side

 

Soon the adventure was over

The children had to go to home

Leaving Neverland was painful

Yet all kids turn into adults

 

Except One!!!

 

 

Reviews

[Spoken]

My favorite childrens' story! I think I have all the Peter Pan movies and books! I enjoyed this poem. Some suggestion:

Fighting thief and pirates

"fighting theives and pirates"

TinkleBell by his side

"TinkerBell"... sorry, I chuckled at this. :)

The children had to go to home

"The children had to go home"

Loved it! Thanks for sharing!

[PoemRodent]

Overall a good read, keep up the good work and feel free to send me a request when ever..

Love and Thoughts,

Dostani

[Lady Tyke]

OK so I love the story of Peter Pan and I think the idea of this poem is brilliant, reading it reminded me of the film so I could see the images of the story which made me smile.
Reading it was slightly jagged not always smooth and some of the rhymes seemed a little out of rhythm for example:
'She told them marvelous stories
Told them fairytales
Spoke of Cinderella
Spoke of witches and spells'
I love this stanza because I automatically think of my own mum telling me stories growing up but I think it would flow slightly smoother if it read:
She told them marvelous stories
Told them fairytales
Spoke of Cinderella
Of witches and their spells
Just a suggestion. Like I said the idea of the poem is awesome and different and I really like it.

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

I thought i reviewed this ,, i do remember reading it and thinking what a wonderful poem and how i would love to 'never grow up in never never land'.. but as the title suggests.. we do leave never land and become adults.
This is a wonderful poem and a light read.

Chloe
xoxo

[pal]

"A brave soul who knew no fear;A child without a past;Living where dreams are made;A placed called Neverland"

very true. past makes us think more.. some time unnecessarily think. this stops true living. child live truely..

very nice poem.
pal

[Lady Luck]

I like the poem. It's sort of strange, but it's still pretty good.

[~ Tex]

Again, I think Spoken covered the business side of the review quite adequately, so as for the pleasure side of things, this was, of course, all pleasure. Nice change of topic for you and a very neat look at a legendary fairytale! Solid work as usual with the imagery.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

You did a wonderful job. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Natalie C]

Hmm, this was a nice recollection of a classic. I loved how you just seemed to capture the well-known tale in a wonderful piece. Made me smile as I allow this to bring back some old memories, which I personally thought was great. Remembering tiny fragile Tinkerbell trying to keep Peter under control.

Nice piece, I really enjoyed reading it.

[Chillbear Latrigue]

I think we all want to be Peter Pan. I know I want to go back. I don't like to address aging, but that's what makes it such a potent topic. Very unusual and clever poem.

[angelina neves]

Lovely!! I suppose in a way i try hard and never really left "Neverland" (not the one of the Peter Pan, but another one that lives in my head)!!! :)