Voices

Sometimes voices disturb us or give us a path where we get involved deeply...

Voices echos in my mind
making my thoughts wild.

Voices sharpen the situation
diminishing the silence around.

Situation getting worse and

I am going crazier every second.

These voices are harder to stop
trying is also a waste of time.

These voices wants to say something
about life
about struggle
about childhood
about peer pressure
about a bright future
about responsibilities
about everything ...

These situations made me think harder

Are these things crazier
or I am believing in them.

Hard to try
Hard to find
these voices are making me blind.

Some voices making me strong
giving me experience in this
field of ignorance.

Balancing the situation between
bad and good voices,
I throw myself in this field of choices.

Wish me good luck
Wish me a bright future
these voices cannot break me apart
Since in every road there are many paths.

I will make my own voice for others
to compete and destroy these bad voices.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

Great poem. Those pesky voices. I like the way you structured the stanzas and used color. Our inner voice to me, Is something that our gut feels warning us or saying yes this feels right. Sometimes those voices are good you just have to be in tune and follow the positive. Love the poem.

This is one of your best poems. I really like this one. A lot of good points. The next to last stanza is just dead on good. I like the way you use colored fonts to add to this. It adds an extra punch to those key words or topics and leaves the reader something to consider later. Great job.

[stars are far]

this is so great .. and i wish you good luck

[light and ashes]

Wonderful poem :] great job. An intruging and interesting write

[Kayla :)]

O.O i loved this poem :) it was really good :D

[Katseye]

Good Job! This one works well.

[EMF]

Really spot on poem. The confusion of the gramar works in this context, like few others, reflecting the state of mind. Really impressed

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true. In the end. We must learn from many people. Must be careful to listen to logic and true wisdom. I like the ending a lot.
"I will make my own voice for others
to compete and destroy these bad voices."
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

This is a great piece, you have gone deep into exploration of the human mind. We don't always like what we find buried deep inside our subconscious. There was one part of your poem which seemed to stand out.
"Is these things are crazier
or i am making one."
I am not sure what you are trying to say there, I suggest a closer inspection and see what can be done.
Good luck.

[Aidz]

I liked this one found it interesting

[TheMizFit]

Very good poem!
I just know there's something wrong here:
"Is these things are crazier
or i am making one."