Along The Broken Road

Along The Broken Road

A Poem by Joseph Mulpeter

 
Along The Broken Road



Gear box rickety, breathing uncontrollably 
The sound that every human dreads
the sound of their final breath

In slow motion i see light, bright light
the soon to be broken light
gust of wind that comes from behind
 throwing my car onto the opposite side
life flashes, before my eyes
my car's now driving, towards the light
 Crash

The final breath my lungs take in
no pain, no exhale, nor suffering

 I feel bad for keeping you waiting
as i lay here, soul slowly fading
the ring in my pocket, that has broken to pieces
my chances of survival, it quickly decreases 
body cold, death taking hold
 as i lay dead along the broken road








© 2017 Joseph Mulpeter



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I like how the poem draws attention to the fragility of life and the difficulty and inevitability of facing mortality. I felt the visual difference in the words, going from larger to smaller as the subject gets closer to his demise sets the tone even further. I read the words as if I could hear shallow breathing and a croaky, shaky voice in my head. Fantastic job!

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beautiful topic and poem...

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Damn... Syllable rhyming and breath are outta this world...! Concretely stays on topic, and feels exactly like it should, a dark trip of emotion... This is written neatly, succinctly, and with "positive" dissonance to syllable slant. Darkly penned... I would advise perhaps normalizing the capitalization of the "I's"... As it somewhat detracts from the visual flow, but seriously... Very, very well written...

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


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Joseph Mulpeter

2 Weeks Ago

thank you so much for your kind words and taking the time to read it. cheers for the advice i'll rem.. read more
Silente

1 Week Ago

Aye, a pleasure
Wow......just brought me into that and reality...extreme...and precise on description. Awesome

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sad. This poem is just filled with sadness. That being said, I really enjoyed this poem a lot. Nice writing!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like story poems. The end and the loss is compelling here. The fact that you mention the 'ring' says a lot without having to go into explanations. You did a good job writing this and I enjoyed.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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Joseph Mulpeter

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read it :) Im glad you enjoyed it 😊
I like how the poem draws attention to the fragility of life and the difficulty and inevitability of facing mortality. I felt the visual difference in the words, going from larger to smaller as the subject gets closer to his demise sets the tone even further. I read the words as if I could hear shallow breathing and a croaky, shaky voice in my head. Fantastic job!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice poetry n thanks for sharing

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Joseph Mulpeter

1 Month Ago

thank you for taking the time to read it :)
I very much like your deadly experience, all except for one little thing . . . the word "crash" could be pumped up a bit, to make it feel more like a full-blown catastrophic event. "Crash" feels kinda wimpy compared to the rest of your poem, which is packed with intensity & horror (nicely done). This also works well as an allegory for life . . . some of us living on the broken road *sigh!* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

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Joseph Mulpeter

1 Month Ago

i agree, looking back at it now i could have worded it a bit better, thank you for pointing that out.. read more
A touching piece, Joseph!

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Joseph Mulpeter

1 Month Ago

Thank you :)
Shasha

1 Month Ago

You're most welcome!
The last road before the end

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Joseph Mulpeter
Joseph Mulpeter

Manchester, United Kingdom



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