The Magic Canopy of love

The Magic Canopy of love

A Poem by Bala Gorthi
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Free verse- For Ten Words Contest

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As I look at the canopy of my life
And recall the red letter day of it
It was the day you entered
The kingdom of my heart, when

My whole existence turned into
A utensil containing
The ocean called love
You roamed like a starfish
Making my tiny heart tickle
You made my own identity diminish
To a sparse microorganism
While you danced in my soul

Like a wild palomino in lush valleys
As the wheel of my life progressed
My dream of our two souls walking abreast
Remained a distant dream
With you reigning my heart
And soul like a monarch.
My own existence became
A nonexistent being, being lost in you...

 

 


© 2017 Bala Gorthi



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Sometimes love can suffocate... sometimes that is wonderful, to be lost in one's true love. But I have a feeling that it would be better to have your 'dream of our two souls walking abreast.' The person in your poem is perhaps happier being a 'non-existent being, being lost in you.'?' Inspired poem.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

4 Months Ago

I think or rather for me love us merging with the other soul in every plane. With every breath the l.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

4 Months Ago

Yes, but don't you think we should keep our separate identities? Although, at a 'soul level' I am su.. read more
Bala Gorthi

4 Months Ago

Of course for the world or profession we all maintain and have to maintain individual identities. read more



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Thank you for taking the 10 Words I Give challenge. Amazing write. I really enjoyed reading it. It's whimsical, almost musical in my mind and each word flows into the next so sweetly. Very romantic.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

8 Months Ago

The pleasure is always mine. Your words really work out our minds. And the result is before you. All.. read more
Hi Bala,

Great fit & imagination with the words... :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

8 Months Ago

Thank you for visiting and appreciating, Hebe.
good use of the words...but i would refrain from the caps--draws too much attention away from theme and more to the words themselves....the poem is expressive in its own right.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Bala Gorthi

8 Months Ago

I agree Sir, but for the contest I have to highlight the words.i'll try to change the caps and highl.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

8 Months Ago

i did have a feeling they asked you to do that for the contest...easier for them to spot the words.
Wicahpi Iyozaza

8 Months Ago

Yes, easier for me to spot the words to make sure they are there. My first preference is make the wo.. read more

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Bala Gorthi
Bala Gorthi

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