Painted Echoes, Scents of Sin

Perhaps now finished in my mind...

I sent her a letter every day, penned by the heart and inked with a soul.
Such whispered words of echoes none recall,
Fading into time where love can't remain.
A drifting symphony of nowhere, never pain.

I shall not want, I cannot want,
The cold in her,
Where the darkness feels so wrong.
Inked in blood,
There the nothingness belongs.

I paint her a dream which words cannot say, brush strokes of steel and colored coal.
These vistas of fantasy and pigments befall,
Wounding the wings of doves that lie,
'Neath bronze hued canopy of shifting, weeping sky.

I shall not write, I should not write,
My love to her,
Where eternity mirrors fair a sight.
Caught in time,
There, the forgotten ones tonight.

I composed her a song even silence cannot slay, tunes of thought and bells only memory can toll.
The sirens sing and beckoning enthrall,
All fears and hopes and more,
Calling you and calling you to softest, ebony shore.

I shall not have, I cannot have,
My only, her,
Where signs of shadows lair.
Lost and cold,
There that golden tower stair.

I sent her a letter every day, bled now a heart and dead black the soul.
Clutch blistered lips that miseries nigh did maul,
Fading with the shine where love did die within.
A failed gift of Painted Echoes, Scents of Sin.

Author's Note

Inspired by the poem "A Letter Every Day" by Dewella~Vintella and myself, Caradoc.

For anyone that wishes to read the piece that inspired this. Enjoy.

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Vinny%20Rune/773454/

Reviews

[Dewella~Vintella]

This was fantastic, Cara! With reading the first line I knew where the base of this came from, but you took it to a whole new level. I remember when we first did A Letter Every Day, reading this is like reading it older, more mature brother.

Its amazing, to sit a read something that we wrote in the past years, and compare it to something we now have written. Maybe you dont see it yourself, but you, as well as your writing, has grown. ^^ Its amazing. And not to be too cocky, but knowing that I helped inspire something like this in even the smallest way slaps a cheesy grin on my face.

I honestly dont have words on how much I love this piece, the emotion, the flow. And the story it tells with each passing line. Perfect.

~Dew

[Caradoc]

The lines wouldn't leave me be after we created Song of Sadness. It reminded me of A Letter Every Day so much that I kept going back and rereading those two paragraphs over and over. I was hit with an urge to write a poem from the man's point of view after the fact, a continuation of what you did.

At first, words came but the stanzas and rhymes were all wrong. I was doing my usual style of lined up down the left side. Then I realized it needed to follow in the format of its inspiration so I made longer sentences and centered it. The idea to switch up the "I shall not write" parts was something that came to me when I was reading A Letter Every Day. The rhythm was just so different from the rest so I did what I did here.

Wow, I'm carrying on, lol. Suffice it to say, I could never have done this without you. So thanks. :)

[Madalyn Beck]

Fantastic. Wow. You have completely blown me away with this write. There are no words to describe how much I truly enjoyed this one. Absolutely astounding!! (:

[Caradoc]

Thank you Madalyn. I'm glad that you found this one enjoyable.

I consider it one of my best.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Reading this it really shows that the way you write is so poetic, some of the words you use.
This was beautiful, romantic, deep, powerful, meaningful and kind of sad.
You truly have a gift, as you say you don't even think about the rhyming it comes naturally, and you write from deep within your soul.
You are truly gifted, my friend.
I honestly can say this was brilliantly penned and a great piece.
Keep writing, because its beautiful.

[Caradoc]

Among all my writing, every poem, I think I have the greatest pride in this one.

Thank you so much for your review and for your compliments. Have a wonderful day. :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

So you should have this was a brilliant piece, I could see it in a book honestly.
Your welcome :) you to :))

[Horizon K.]

I composed her a song even silence cannot slay...
Wistful and hopeful in a fatally sad way... I haven't read what this is based on, but it has the feeling of a tragic love story, with hurts and blames and inescapable dark fates. I do, since this is you, picture a vampire writing letters of love and apology to a lover whose life has eternally darkened and changed...
A beautiful letter, Cara...

[Caradoc]

Well that's one way I didn't envision this piece, but now that you mention it, I can totally see how it could be like that.

Thank you, Horizon. I'm glad you enjoyed this one.

[Horizon K.]

Haha... well, now I am ever more curious to read the piece that inspired this:) Take care, Cara

[Caradoc]

You too, Horizon.

[Horizon K.]

I read it... the inspiration. A lovely piece, and now I read this differently. To write, and keep writing, to the one you love, yet unresponsive. To keep throwing your feelings into a black hole, magnetic in its hold of your heart and hope. And how tightly held, the hope... such a sad kind of hope this is... when the truth is deep down, known...

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

"I composed her a song even silence cannot slay"... well done!

[Caradoc]

Thanks.

[quinfinn]

incredible writing displayed here, my friend. although the font is a bit small, i enjoyed this tremendously.this absolutely resonates!

[Caradoc]

I'm glad I could write something you enjoyed. Thanks for stopping by.

[quinfinn]

this is a remarkable write, my friend. always welcome!

[Talkless]

Now this is definately poetic justies

[Caradoc]

Thank you for stopping by.

[rnuff]

WOW such another powerful deep piece. Throughly enjoyed

[Caradoc]

I'm glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

[Jodie Ng]

WOW. This is just amazing. The first line to the last is ineffably beautiful and that does not even begin to do your words, your poem justice. The tempo and rhythm of it adds to the beauty of this poem. I love this line here "penned by the heart and inked with a soul." amazing! brilliant! You construct the words in such a way that captivates the reader, almost as if they are the poem and I was drawn in right from the beginning and did not want to stop reading. This is truly a work of art, you amazingly amazing poet! I commend you greatly

[Caradoc]

Well, thank you. Your words give me a glad heart and boost my already large ego. I'm happy that you enjoyed it and hope that, should you choose to read more of my work, it continues to amaze and entertain you.

Thanks for stopping by with a read and a review.

-Caradoc

[Lily Mae]

This is phenomanal. I bow to your wonderful ability to entice the reader in and weave the words around the mind.. it played inside my minds eye like a mini movie..xo
Love it...

[Caradoc]

So glad you enjoyed the poem and that it was able to bring something in your imagination to life. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

[Lily Mae]

It was my pleasure.. I'm envious of your ability. It makes me feel like a 7 count crayola box girl next to the jumbo box :) I hope to read you more and expand to a larger box soon...xo