Feels Like Forever...

Feels Like Forever...

A Poem by Silente
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December...

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Woke up this morning, feels like forever since the mourning of your name...
In shame I hid tethered to fame, a blind grain of sand against a slimy flame
I'm gaining momentum like rain, a zany feelin' bein' clean
weaning myself off the draining lifestyle, my grind paid in dreams
My time stood-still, feels like December when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... 
A starship trooper in September, I ran around in embers
no space vacuum in dust, I grin and shoulder on
In my holster a wand, it sings songs about wrongs
atrocities gonged through the city, a bong hit of infinity
I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us
I know she will not see this, I'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it

© 2017 Silente



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this is one of the most straight forward poems of yours i have read so far...i like that you have mixed your enigmatic flare with the concrete ..i feel the pain of it ...especially engaged by "...a bong hit of infinity" ..fantastic says i! and the seeing one last time in closing is sublime the way you put it ... "i'm just a bleeding creature..." is killer in the vulnerable state of your protagonist ...moves my heart out in empathy :(
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

Thank you muchly, Noodle of Einstein... It felt that way when writing it, and am glad to know it evo.. read more



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Filled my heart with sadness while reading. writing with emotion doesn't mean much unless the reader is feeling it. Thumbs up.

Posted 10 Months Ago


"just a bleeding creature"at the end ..points out the pain and just how intense the emotions truly run .a poignant piece so well expressed and written

Posted 1 Year Ago


I rated it high because I can feel the pain of this poem

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

The pain is what spurred it... Thank you, Dennis
Dennis N. K

1 Year Ago

Always welcome
"I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us."

Extraordinary line one could get lost in. This is my first of your's, and feel moved to read more.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

Oh, well thank you, Kelly... That means a lot coming from a writer such as yourself... I liked that .. read more
There was a sad longing written here...but then again the will of a survivor coming through. That seems to be a pervading theme in your work, that you are a survivor. Here's to making it through all the tough times to better days ahead. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

A keen eye, friend... Have certainly had some tough times... But what are tough times but hotter fir.. read more
You're gifted silente! I love reading your work

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

Thanks ever so much, Jiya...! I love people reading my work! So fancy that...
this is one of the most straight forward poems of yours i have read so far...i like that you have mixed your enigmatic flare with the concrete ..i feel the pain of it ...especially engaged by "...a bong hit of infinity" ..fantastic says i! and the seeing one last time in closing is sublime the way you put it ... "i'm just a bleeding creature..." is killer in the vulnerable state of your protagonist ...moves my heart out in empathy :(
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

Thank you muchly, Noodle of Einstein... It felt that way when writing it, and am glad to know it evo.. read more
songs of wrongs. I know how the words go. thanks for the lovely piece.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

Aye, thank you very much for appreciating
Nice structure and emotions with a strong voice inside your prose,
Forever is a long time...with those gills appearing at the right moment.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

Right? Gills can make for a lasting time in little to no oxygen environments... Thank you, Josie
Josie E. Cook M. A.

1 Year Ago

Yes! :)
You're welcome.
This is so good. I wanted to read more my friend.
"I know she will not see this, i'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it"
The above lines. Strong, logical and perfect. You made the reader feel the thoughts and the emotions. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

1 Year Ago

You are most welcome, Coyote, but thank you even more for appreciating it...
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I did like and you are welcome my friend.

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