Feels Like Forever...

Feels Like Forever...

A Poem by Silente
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December...

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Woke up this morning, feels like forever since the mourning of your name...
In shame I hid tethered to fame, a blind grain of sand against a slimy flame
I'm gaining momentum like rain, a zany feelin' bein' clean
weaning myself off the draining lifestyle, my grind paid in dreams
My time stood-still, feels like December when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... 
A starship trooper in September, I ran around in embers
no space vacuum in dust, I grin and shoulder on
In my holster a wand, it sings songs about wrongs
atrocities gonged through the city, a bong hit of infinity
I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us
I know she will not see this, i'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it

© 2017 Silente



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This is so good. I wanted to read more my friend.
"I know she will not see this, i'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it"
The above lines. Strong, logical and perfect. You made the reader feel the thoughts and the emotions. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Days Ago

You are most welcome, Coyote, but thank you even more for appreciating it...
Coyote Poetry

4 Days Ago

I did like and you are welcome my friend.



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Nice structure and emotions with a strong voice inside your prose,
Forever is a long time...with those gills appearing at the right moment.

Posted 2 Days Ago


This is so good. I wanted to read more my friend.
"I know she will not see this, i'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it"
The above lines. Strong, logical and perfect. You made the reader feel the thoughts and the emotions. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Days Ago

You are most welcome, Coyote, but thank you even more for appreciating it...
Coyote Poetry

4 Days Ago

I did like and you are welcome my friend.
"when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... "
Freakin' genius.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Days Ago

Not as genius as your face...! Hah, thank you, Carol
So touching. 'Leaving' is one of my most unwanted words. But sometimes things happen and people need to move on.
I love the style of writing. Great!


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Days Ago

Agreed, and absolutely true, thank you so much for reading
I'm more of a straightforward reader & writer, so I'm not catching your every idea here . . . still, I very much love an uninhibited write like this that throws ideas together in original ways, with original expressions, etc. Your title line is a feeling I get often, so it's relatable. There's a hint of rhyming, but not in a structured way, & this contributes to the word play . . . feels like you're having as much fun with the way words SOUND, as much as what the meaning conveys.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Months Ago

I am all for the "both sides of the coin style reviewing"... Which is what you seem to be best at, B.. read more
barleygirl

4 Months Ago

I never even thought about word sounds being a big part of writing until I started on this website 1.. read more
'.. in the rust of spaces left between us'
Cunning 😁
Metaphors galore! You are amazing with them.. 👍
Loved your writeup as always 😊

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Months Ago

Thanks very much, Krutika... It is satisfying to hear such praise from a noteworthy poetess...
Vivid descriptions and stellar metaphors. Your talent shines in every well written line. However, what I enjoy most is your unique style. Amazing writing my friend. :) Julie

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Months Ago

Oh wow, Jewel... Your talent for beautiful articulation is apparent in how you review... Thanks so m.. read more
That's how it is at times.
Sometimes crush or affection causes us to get attracted to others; but reexamination makes us to know our limitations.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Months Ago

So very true, Rubein... Thank you for this wonderful insight...
Rubein Geterminah

4 Months Ago

You're welcome
You are extremely talented
Saying goodbye to a person or a thought
i say so much in this piece
as it becomes so difficult to just let go
Lovely piece
a work of art

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Starz, a lovely review....
I love the way how you bind words so eloquently to form an intricate piece of poetry. This poem very acutely describes the turmoil of the poet's mind. Amazing!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente

4 Months Ago

I adore the way you bind words together for an interesting review...! Absolutely thank you, and spot.. read more

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Tags: Poetry, Lyrics, Romance, Love, Sad, Dark

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Silente

Denver, CO



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