Alaskan Savage

Lemons and elephants...

Manic erratic combative out ah-it element flippin' it rippin' it gettin' it zippin' it dippin' it imminent intricate immigrant

 Now I be sippin' it cinnamon dividend evidence elephants skimmin' it grippin' it ribbons and lemons of heavens

I'm sentient definite devilish effortless semblance of betterment

Gotta be synonyms 

Cinema sinnin' a kitten a mitten a bitter December remember avenger develop ah-leverage

A passage gadget

Passive habit

Rabid aladdin' grabbin' magic rapid' askin' for Alaskan ravage a savage maskin' gaspin' like passion baskin'

A basket is wrappin' for havoc unlashin' rations bashin' taverns

Follow the lanterns

Hollow on Saturn...

The rings are vapor craters that are tapered for able-daters

 I'm a saber ravin' a raven raidin' a labor haven

Craven vampire cravin' a safer empire

An umpire says safe pavement but its fake diamond 

The rough slimin' abidin' hidin' tridents violent

Try to dent a silent rhyme-in half a second

It's past eleven I'm bidin' my second second chance countin' islands as they pass 

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such an interesting piece...has such movement in it's beat, and being more about not moving, being apathetic....letting things just happen----we stand too idle these days, i believe...we need more voices to be raised in defiance of what we have become as a society....
nicely done here.
powerful.
j.

[Chase Dylan]

Coming from you, Sir Jacob, tis a compliment of the highest accord... You are still one of the best writers on here, thank you, sincerely...

[Stephanie M]

Good use of words. I liked the way you compared the two unlikeliest of things: lemons, and elephants. This would be really cool to hear out loud. I love your poetry. Do you perform your poetry at poetry readings?

[andrew mitchell]

Is this the new movement of poetic rap? Only you can pull these mastered writes with your signature style!

[Coyote Poetry]

You need to write a book. The poem. The short statements made me want to know and read more. Each statements took the reader to places and thoughts. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Chase Dylan]

You read and review SO much poetry... So for you to say I need to write a book is a heavy compliment! Thanks so much, Coyote, again...

[Coyote Poetry]

You should. You make the words dance and you are welcome.

[barleygirl]

This is one of my favorites of yours becuz I like the way your rhymes here are more unusual & intriguing. As usual, I only understand bits & pieces, but there are definite flashes of brilliance here! You are the best one to do this type of writing since I've been on this website (2 years) *wink! wink!* Fondly, Margie

[Chase Dylan]

Winks! They could mean anything... Haha... Thanks so much, Barley, glad to return and see such praise for some of my works... It is nothing but pure joy to hear your words...

[duff]

My man. You took this to new levels. Said F that and made new ones, lol. I've read a ton of your stuff and this just crushed it. You took rhyming and named it b***h. Well played bro.

[Chase Dylan]

I do enjoy raising my own bar, Duff... Tt has been a long time... Life has slapped me around pretty good... But I still stand. Super happy to see you around, and super keen on your new writing... Thanks for enjoying this one

[duff]

Awesome to hear from you man. I'm almost settled here and you should come visit. That would be sick.

[Chase Dylan]

That would indeed be nice, mate... Life is never full of many friendly faces... Gets tiring after a bit. Hope all goes well on your end

[duff]

You would like it here bro. It's small and secluded. A good place to relax and reflect. Likewise.

[Chase Dylan]

I am def' going to be taking you up on this, lol... I have read some of your new stuff, it is quite kickass... Just trying to slog through the backlog of RR's before I dig into reviewing the stuff I really want to get at...

[duff]

Right on brother. I'm signing a lease tomorrow so you are welcome anytime. Thanks for checking them out. I'm anxious to hear your thoughts.

[emmajoy]

You are a raving uniqueist.. ok, no such word, but you crack eggs and make word omelets so quickly! I've read the above twice.. have a headache now - understand a word or two of it, or, not. What there is about it is - the buzz it leaves, a journey taken to somewhere, goodness knows where but the dervish ride was exciting.

One day, please publish a manual of 'how to.. ' with your poems! Brilliant but .. can't think of the word. :)

[Chase Dylan]

Hilariously enough, EJ... If I did that... ANYONE could write how I do... As it is nothing but an exact formula of mechanics... No direction or fresh idea needed... Just a flow landscape... Very happy you enjoyed this one, thanks much

[Carol Cashes]

*sigh* I practically had to take a nap after "sounding out" this one!
You are a wizard with the rhyming of words that actually connect in a crazy non-patternish pattern...
I'm gettin' my money back on that gym membership, I just need to stand up when I read your work, read out loud and my cardio is done for the day!!!

[Chase Dylan]

HAH, I am telling you... Nothing is needed but a stiff brew of wordplay... That is the key to infinite life! Lol

[Jon Roggie]

I feel a slow talking,
contrast to your manic words.
Smiling in the discourse.
Rapid use of words,
while beguiling,
showing your set limitations.
Some would think that an insult,
but we both should disagree.
Your words are ready to fly.

Ever write to a song?

[Chase Dylan]

I have, this was written to a song, and many others... Most of the poems on here are edits of lyrics I have written, or just mashups of verses

[Jon Roggie]

It shows. Loved it.

[Abhishek Asthana]

Such an extraordinary talent which really needs to be applauded every single time... This one was so fast specially the first half one... But the pace was finally maintained in the last stanza and it nailed it... CLAP CLAP :)

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you... Thank you very much, as always. The first half IS very fast... Especially spoken, heh

[Zoya]

Savage! Again, poor me, I don't understand your high quality wordplay. I can't still draw out any meaning I mean. Though it doesn't stop me from applauding your talent to layout such extraordinary pieces. It's really catchy. Great stuff

[Chase Dylan]

Ahh, Zoe, I have missed hearing you tell me I make no sense, hahaha... I jest, but seriously... You and I, both... That is all that matters in the long run, eh? The format, other than that... People can run wild with the ideas

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks very much for the review, always a pleasure to read, lol

[Zoya]

Haha, you're welcome