Creeping murk

Creeping murk

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze


So many screams muffled into silences

Silences that echoed through the walls

Walls that wept blood, night and day

The blood clotted and turned black

As black as her sooty eyes.





© 2015 Jyoti_Ablaze


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This is good! I love the first three lines. You captured the ugliness of force, depression and oppression in few lines.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

You got this bang on! Thank you so much for the kind review.
This really demonstrates the dark side of all of us and our society. We all disgrace it but never stand against it. I hope your creation will ignite our souls and we will be able to stand and fight against it. Thanks for sharing. Indeed a masterpiece.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

This made my day. Thank you Gaurav.
oh, this is so good and dark...i see two ways to take this (though neither may be right): the murder of someone or the creeping murk of depression...i love the form, the photo and the content...great job, Jyoti

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Yes you are very near to dig out background, Thomas. Its the depression caused by oppression. Thank .. read more
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8 Years Ago

Ah, yes, the darker side of society...i will never understand the need that some people have to oppr.. read more
This was devilishly and darkly sexy. Keep up the great work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your commentary.
I love it more then I should.
I enjoy the darker side of poetry.
Wonderful job. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you for your commentary.
Amazing composition. Every line is well crafted. Well penned

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you!
this is too good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

8 Years Ago

Thank you.

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