Drunk

forgive me

and my actions 

a mistake 

blind to the consequences 

of burning 

through the nights and days

tied caution to a stake

flames engulf 

the every whim

sensibility 

turned to ash 

as I fuelled the fire 

with my drunkenness 

drunk in love

with you

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

awwwwwwwwwwwwww! :) and here i thought it was going to end in regret and hangovers ...the form makes the rhythm so easy ...and the scenes inspired played out as vivid recollections .. so well done from where i sit!
E.
my dear friend ... it is really getting hard to find your "stuff" i have not already read ...just saying ;)

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

Acting without thinking; even when love is involve, there might be a huge mistake. Well articulated, KWP.

[Neville]

Short and sweet and to the point. I hope I enjoy it just as much in the morning when I am sober...NIce,

N

[marcus]

Ahh, we can get drunk on so many different things, I liked this!

[Justin Robben]

Beautiful, with a...frenzied passion beneath. Even the way you've laid it out and presented it holds an almost frantic, frenetic pace to it. Poetry is not my strong suit, it's my weakest in a weak bunch, but I thoroughly enjoyed this one.
Hell...I understood it, which is half the battle against poetry for me! ;)

[KWP]

oh hello Justin and thanks and lovely to meetcha :)

glad you like it and even better you understood it too - yay a win for me and a win for you X

[The Twin Arenas]

Great opening line. Spoken like a lover/drunkard/apologist
It's the same s**t. You could make this drunk even sloppier. I want to know more about how drunkness and love run together.

[KWP]

and funnily enough it ain't even about alcohol ...

thanks for ya thoughts X

[The Twin Arenas]

Yeah, I know........;l

[Sydney]

The ending was like a knife, so harsh and sharp. But so beautifully composed.. Like this a lot.

[KWP]

oh hello Sydney and thanks so much for your time spent - much appreciated chick - glad you enjoyed X

[Alex Cook]

Very nice. I enjoyed this.

[Jesse]

The booze is a metaphor for not concentrating on something and an unwanted outcome occurred... I've done the same, but me... I've been a fool!

[Robert]

I guess we all do things foolish when were drunk or in love that we are glad we said or that we regret. I good piece here KWP.