a night goes by

just randomness inspired by the night

The sky starts to darken

and the land goes quiet

as the sun sets down

beyond the western wall

whose tall tall mountains

reach out and touch the night

before fading into darkness

and disappearing from sight

The sun lays down for the evening

as the stars start to wake

the deep blue sky whispers promises

to guard you while you sleep

In that sullen sky of darkest night

the stars gaze down from the heavens

to comfort the sleeping

the people who lay dreaming

of adventure, wealth, love, and lust

the moon has risen in the sky

to assume its rightful place

yet it travels a doomed lonely path

across the sky's chasing the fabled sun

oh so rarely do they meet

face to face

and so as the night passes

the moon lays down

where the sun set 

only a night ago

and for a brief instant

there is no great orb in the sky

nothing hovers in the silent night

and the sky seems so lonely

so dark an empty

but over the horizon comes

the breaking of a new day

and the long since asleep

awaken feeling refreshed

unaware of the beauty they just missed

Reviews

[The Wave]

"The sun lays down for the evening
as the stars start to wake
the deep blue sky whispers promises
to guard you while you sleep"

Nice, really enjoyed reading this.
It can be cleaned up a bit, I did notice a few errors, and the rhyme scheme seems a bit inconsistent, but not bad.
I like your descriptions, but feel adding more imagery will make this A-mazing.

Overall, written well, love the closing line.
Good job.

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but over the horizon comes
the breaking of a new day
and the long since asleep
awaken feeling refreshed
unaware of the beauty they just missed

Such beautiful words here. So well written and very descriptive. This is wonderful

[princessraymi101]

"but over the horizon comes
the breaking of a new day
and the long since asleep
awaken feeling refreshed
unaware of the beauty they just missed"

I love this ending line! I see you could use a capital at the beginning of this line for the first word, but, I see your poem spoke to me in a way that grabbed my emotions and told them, "Hey, emotions, feel good!" This was a well written poem, a few minor errors that could be fixed in editing, but, overall, not bad and a well written poem! Well done! 99/100!

[Allmax]

An endless cycle repeating never to meet in the middle. Such is life. An awesome adventure for my mind to grasp. Full of subtle nuances to be absorbed into my thoughts. Your poem has an even flow, was very easy to read and it is obvious you write with the passion given to you by talent...

[Nathan Durham]

That was really good. I like the mental effects the personifications create. I also like the flow that the style creates.

[gimpy]

wow I love the wording and the personification you use for the sun and the moon your style of writing is excellent and I love it