Decayed Wings

Decayed Wings

A Poem by Lexi Askew

He asked me if it hurt when I fell from heaven
And it wasn't a charming question
My wings were set ablaze
As I crashed through the Earth's atmosphere
Each feather plucked with painstaking vulgarity
I grasped at moons and galaxies
In a desperate attempt
To slow my blazing descent
And the burns still smoke
My scarred back still smoldering 
There went my ignorant purity
As a gritty harsh reality was thrust upon me

"You should know. 
You pushed me."

© 2019 Lexi Askew



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This is such a powerful piece you wrote here.
I love the way you start the intro. with a cliche phrase men very often use, thinking that they are charming and sleek, as a pick up line to get into a woman's knickers:
'He asked me if it hurt when I fell from Heaven'

Then using the spiritual, divine connotation of that phrase, in reference to the biblical Fall of Man from Heaven, you completely turn the cliche on its head by tackling and outlining the serious ramification of such 'fall', as the poem grasps and transports the reader to another metaphysical dimension:
'My wings were set ablaze
as I crashed through the Earth's atmosphere,
each feather plucked with painstaking vulgarity,
I grasped at moons and galaxies
in a desperate attempt
to slow my blazing descent...'

From that first line, which is a cheesy and cliche line, you take us all into the approximate truth of our general fall whose effects still affect us to this very day.

Then you sum it up with these words:
''You should know.
you pushed me.''
And thus, the first introduction line and the last two lines completely complement each other, making the poem whole in concept, content and context, with such simplicity and depth and picturesque imagery.

This is a very beautiful, truthful and urgent poem that commands automatic respect.

You certainly should follow your dreams of becoming full fledged teacher and published author.
I am a fan of yours already, with only the first poem of yours that I just read.

YOU ARE A GENIUS THE WORLD WILL KNOW ABOUT.
PLEASE KEEP YOUR ESSENCE AND DON'T LET THE FAME CHANGE YOU.

Posted 5 Days Ago


Lexi Askew

5 Days Ago

I am so glad you appreciated this poem, I put a lot of effort into creating a certain atmosphere aro.. read more
I dig this, makes me think of resurrection and s**t hahah

Posted 6 Days Ago


The last two lines are a real punch in the gut right at the end which makes it so much more powerful.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Sounds like that fall even from heaven

Posted 1 Week Ago


oh my goodness, Lexi! such brilliant and exquisite pain and fall ... sheesh! lots of layers in this one says i .. and universal for sure ... all religions have one explanation or another as to our sinful core ;( few have a realistic solution says i! your closing is killer after such a brutal ride ... man! i hardly dare ask "Is it I?" ... real fine poetry for me!
E.

Posted 1 Week Ago


The evocative imagery you used in this was amazing. It carries an incredible emotional punch. Thanks for writing.

Posted 1 Week Ago


You portray such powerful imagery. One can easily see your horrible plight.
A very good write.

Take care - Dave

Posted 1 Week Ago


Decayed Wings
lovely title/ great write

Posted 1 Week Ago


This is a very interesting poem. It paints a very vivid image, and gets the idea across but then those last two lines:

"You should know.
You pushed me."

It's like the mic-drop of the whole concept. This could very well be turned into a story, purely based around this poem alone.

Posted 1 Week Ago


Lexi Askew

1 Week Ago

I'm really happy you like this poem, I worked really hard on creating that mic-drop effect that you .. read more
CarthageThorne

1 Week Ago

Honestly Lexi, you have the writing style that I believe would be so very moving in either a "Spoken.. read more
Lexi Askew

1 Week Ago

I've always wanted to do something like that, so you don't know how much it means for you to say tha.. read more
Wow.. Loved it..
The style is different yet elegant

Posted 1 Week Ago



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Lexi Askew
Lexi Askew

Canada



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I'm a 17 year old high school student in my last year of high school. My plans for after graduation is to do all the necessary schooling to become a university English professor, though my long term d.. more..

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