I'm Not Ok...

He didn't want her to be afraid. He just wanted her to be happy... He comforted her...trying to end her fears

I laid there on the cold hard floor

In terrible pain

And my heart broken

I couldnt stand

I was weak

And I felt fear

I brought my hands to my face

Covering any signs of tears

As I cried

I suddenly felt someones hand touch my cold skin

As I moved my hands away from my face

I looked up to see a boy

Wearing ripped blue jeans

And had long silky black hair

He sat down right next to me

And wiped away my tears

He moved his gaze to mine

And stared into my hopeless eyes

As I watch his eyes on mine

I could tell that he was afraid, worried, and confused

Nobody had ever seen me break down until now

I just couldnt fight these tears anymore

And I didnt care if anybody saw me cry

I didnt have the strength to hold it in anymore

I continued to lay there

I felt so cold now...

I wrapped my arms around myself to warm my frigid body

The boy sitting next to me looked at me

And saw that I was shivering

So he moved closer toward me

Than he rapped his hands around my body

Trying to comfort me

His body was very warm

I rested my head on his shoulder

And closed my eyes

Just laying on him

Still and silent

Not saying one word...

We were all alone..

And I was so scared

And I just wasnt ok

Reviews

[Satellite Heart]

Whoa. that was friggin sweet (lol) You should seriously consider writing a book about it??

This is really emotional. I enjoy it-I can feel your pain, and it's like I'm right there with you.

[Alelei]

Quite an emotional piece but just beautiful (:

[Emily]

this is beautiful. I know how it can feel to be sad and alone. It is very very scary to try and figure out yourself when you are inside your own head. there are horrible days and there are good days, it is the kindness of strangers that makes the world a better place. The web site www.mylifeisg.com is a great website to show simple amazing days and acts of kindness. It is sure you make you smile, just like the boy's actions in this piece made me smile.

nice work!

[.nicole.]

Loved this. The boy just wants her to feel better, and make everything okay, but sometimes, as much as he might want, it's just not possible.

[Brandon]

yet another emotion filled piece. Another good piece.

[Scarlet Pulse]

Your feelings are intense and portrayed well but it feels like you were telling a story about what happened. If your intention was to make the poem sound like a story, than you did it well.

[Jason]

Such pain....such an underlining emotion grabbing at the core of the soul. Brilliant work yet again.... :)

Jay

[Jess.]

This is something I can relate to....about no one ever seeing her break down before....and how she tried to hide the tears...
Good piece, I could feel the emotions as I read along.

[deeps]

Quite the emotional write here, powerfully written and well expressed!