If Matters Fact

Ostracized
forsaken place
these bars of time
no saving grace
from whence I came
a fence I face
around and round
no end
in chase
~
No-one
to share
I stand alone
to cheat despair
I scratch this poem
if matters fact
it has no home
amid the care
dispense
of drone
~~~

Reviews

[barleygirl]

As a lover of rhyme & rhythm, I love the way this poem reads. It sounds like a nursery rhyme with somewhat of a "limerick" pacing. Love these 2 concepts together: "ostracized" . . . "bars of time" (the cleverness of describing time as a jailer) & toward the end of V1, love the "round & round" sensation resembling how we grind on stuff or how life can be repetitive or monotonous. Then I love how V2 turns a bit of a corner, identifying the nebulous affliction expressed thus far as being loneliness or isolation, then turning to poetry writing as an escape. That's so real, so honest, & serious stuff in the midst of a poem that seems to be a bit nonsensical. Love that juxtaposition of sensations (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Cherrie Palmer]

In a empty room we sometimes talk aloud, to self , a lost love or God. But when lonely those words feel empty. But a connection ( even therapy) is forged when we release these feelings onto paper.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'if Matters Fact'
McEltic,
A poem like this is recognizable as something written to possibly move through some kind of emotion. I think a lot of writing does come from the heart one way or another as that is where living comes from. Humanity is always processing. Is it loneliness? Is it discouragement? Well those are real responses to difficulty. Moving forward for nothing really stays the same. I would love to know what this poem was about. Bless you and I hope your enjoying this early summer.
Blessings,
Kathy

[McEltic]

After a disagreement, you can feel like you’ve lost all your friends and nothing you say or do has any affect on things... the feeling compounds when the cause is unwarranted

[Kathy Van Kurin]

McEltic,
Yes, I understand. I appreciate you taking the time to express what was part of this writing. I like that!
Bless ya!
Kathy