Bouquet of Withered Flowers

Bouquet of Withered Flowers

A Poem by Mia

I thought two hearts were better than one

That our grey skies were better than none

How wrong I was

I should beg your forgiveness

But you’ll see me weak

 

Was your hold to keep me safe?

Or just to keep me

I don’t have anywhere to go

And yet I need to leave

 

Don’t breathe

I don’t want forever

I want the promise that death will part us

‘You don’t know what you’ve got till you’ve got it”

 

No love, not even hate

Just flaccid indifference

And I really am sorry


© 2012 Mia



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I think indifference is even worse than hate. Your poetry is consistently emotive. The images are wonderful. Very good work. Lydi**

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

I am an emotional person; I suppose that reflects in the things I write. Thank you Lydi…have a lov.. read more
Love each and every line. Ah you are so good at describing feelings!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Thank you lovely...don't know why I missed your reviews ...sorry for that x
anxia

4 Years Ago

Its okay :).
I'm going to use these as my wedding vows *laugh* Seriously, you've just summed up my entire relationship...(I wish I was kidding)

:-D

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Not worry...you're a tough cookie. I just wish more for you than being comfy...I'm young and naive.... read more
KAOlmsted

4 Years Ago

Well...when 40 comes and goes, you'll appreciate the comfort ;-) (We have our moments, though *wink.. read more
Mia

4 Years Ago

:D
Nice rhythm and flow/

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Thanks Baby :)
At times Mia we don't know our own complicated emotions and you set this out so well in this poem. It feels like a mix of feelings jumbled like clothes in a tumble drier. Sad but tinged with longing and uncertainty.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Two visits...lucky me. Thank you John :)
Hope you're well!
John Alexander McFadyen

4 Years Ago

Well I respond to 99% of my read requests and I realised that I never seem to get them from you so I.. read more
Mia

4 Years Ago

:D
The picture and title tie into your words quite well. I absolutely LOVE how you ended it. Just flaccid indifference-- oh yes. Yes ma'am! I love that.

I have subscribed to you but for some stupid reason, you don't show up in my subs.
-_- That's getting annoying.

I JUST realized you live in South Africa; I've always adored that accent....sigh...anyhoo... great poem, sweetness. :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

YAY! I wasn't really sure I could take admin!!
That_Girl

4 Years Ago

Hahaha no need to fight anymore! ;D
Mia

4 Years Ago

:D
xx
Poignant write, Mia written with heart and last three lines speaks volumes.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by, its always a pleasure!
"I thought two hearts were better than one
That our grey skies were better than none"

Again, you start right off with lines that set the tone and portent what will come. This is honest and sad, that lonely place when there is just nothing left, not even the care to really try.
‘You don’t know what you’ve got till you’ve got it” Great line especially.

Nice work and realistic.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Mia

4 Years Ago

Did I mention you're absolutely wonderful? You are!! Thank you so much!
So, yes, you found a title but maybe at first it was difficult because there are some emotions we can't name because our emotions are such a bewildered jumble there's no one root cause ..
Such a sad post, Mia, yet wonderfully fluent - not sure how you managed that, but you did, Those last three lines .. oh my, dear girl, they speak chapter and verse.

Posted 4 Years Ago


emmajoy

4 Years Ago

Sometimes tis best to lay things out in front of one, see them for they are, mull them over .. sleep.. read more
Mia

4 Years Ago

Why are you so wonderful?! I do, often and I count my blessing...I have many and I refuse to take th.. read more
emmajoy

4 Years Ago

Nothing wiser than a wise woman! :))) (yes, I know, quite a few will argue with that!)

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