Written with air ... (dolor)

Written with air ... (dolor)

A Poem by Richard
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Written with air …

There may come a time
when thoughts dissipate,
like frost that lingered
as lace on green blades;
and, like early dew,
you are no longer here,
inside my mind, my soul ...
my heart unthawed
by life's sun 
bowing  out,

in abjured encore.


Where have our moments gone,
those that called us out to dance,
to warmly embrace it all,
to revel in laughter's afterglow,
shining with tears of forgiveness;
and, what of all the gold we shared,
our hours spent
in ethereal lovemaking?


I knew you - oh so well ...
the child inside,
the woman of you, too,
and all that life called us to be,
together ~
in the spark of eternal
forevermore.


Our days and nights,
spent wrapped in splendor,
thrust together,
entwined like vines
with insatiable fingers ...
swimming your pools
of endless depth,
those verdant portals
into your soul.


It is as though ...
a mystical wand passed over us,
and like the sigh
of a baby's first breath ...
here, in soft feathered touch,

... shhh!


Gone now,

forevermore ...
as if we, You and I,
were merely ~
Written with air.


Richard W. Jenkins
©2016


Not my best work, I know, but I needed to say something that felt real,
exactly as it crossed my heart ... I know you understand.
I didn't even stop to check for spelling ...

so very much unlike me ... LOL!
Any help is welcomed.


© 2016 Richard



Author's Note

Richard
Illustration: Wikimedia Commons

Yeah, I know, it needs something … any help will be appreciated. : )

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A beautiful post, full of sincere emotions that poets can express so readily.. (whether edited or not.) Your sincerity is more than apparent by some wonderful said phrases, 'Where have our moments gone, ~ those that called us out to dance, ~ to warmly embrace it all, ~ to revel in laughter's afterglow,..:

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

4 Months Ago

Thank you, Emma Joy,
I have always looked forward to your deeply expressive, gratifying, and .. read more



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I love it. Everything about it seems perfect in my humble opinion. Your choices of words, the flow as if sussurated and flowing with the wind. Or like breaths effortless but carried by a tender form of suffering.
The word dolor in your title caught my eye; are you referring to the Spanish word - pain? I'd love that. (I've written or rather scribbled some poems in Spanish once, one of those I still share here). A beautiful poem.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

You bless me, Dear Poetess!
Your beautifully rendered words of understanding, insight, and de.. read more
I don't speak or write with the eloquence of many who write here, but I know what I like.
You write such heartfelt thoughts. You wring the the hearts of any that have loved and lost that part which completes them.
I'm sorry, but try as I may I see nothing that could make this tribute to love more complete.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

3 Months Ago

Hi, Dave! : )
I, too, know what I like, and I know I like the keen graciousness you've gifted.. read more
Not your best ?? wow.. I think it is one of
YOUR BEST !
Real.. touching..and warm

Jazzy.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

J. J.  Nightingale

4 Months Ago

but..... a couple I deleted, as to not appear even dumber than I am thought to be on the Cafe..lol
Richard

4 Months Ago

Well, I am sorry to have missed ANY of your always excellent reviews, Jasmine, and I cannot begin to.. read more
J. J.  Nightingale

4 Months Ago

Ha Ha....ok
I really don't see what's wrong with this poem. I mean it was so beautiful and heartfelt and was filled with such emotion from the start that i was compelled to read further. Such a beautiful love poem. And i did not find any misspelled words. Fantastic job!!!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

11 Months Ago

Thank you ever-so warmly, Dear Rayanna!
You've just become the sunshine in my cold, overcast .. read more
Raysira

11 Months Ago

you are very welcome... i love how you express yourself so eloquently- even in your comments. You ar.. read more
Richard

11 Months Ago

"B L U S H *"
Phenomenal assonance here and I'd rather be wrapped in splendour than in yesterday's newspaper.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

11 Months Ago

Thanks, again, Alan!

Yes, I can certainly see your point … LOL! ⁓ Richard
Mr. Jenkins,
Regarding your author's note:
I think I have found a little detail you need to address..some clean hankies, for those of us reading.
I was going to suggest a warning label, but then I looked up dolor and sure enough, you had one.
You wield your pen and thoughts equal, to a great wizard casting spells.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Dear Lady Renée,
You've shined a sweet glow into the darkness of early morning, gifting this.. read more
Sir, this poem of yours is likable and well-written. You are plunged in the memory of your separated lover- you have described everything beautifully with nice comparisons. Similes- entwined like vines, when thoughts dissipate like frost that lingered as lace on green blade- very beautiful and they add to imagery.
And, a very good- though sad- ending
"Gone now,
forevermore ...
as if we, You and I,
were merely ~
Written with air."
Glad you shared the poem.


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you so very much, Vatsal,
It is encouraging and pleasing to know you like this piece, a.. read more
The quote you have chosen by Leonardo Da Vinci that speaks of poetry as that which is felt seems fitting for your words as you express that this is not your best work but that it is written exactly as it crossed your heart, so I am drawn to this particular poem after reading several of your other pieces because it is the emotion that has made it reach into my spirit and grab at my heartstrings. You have captured the essence of loving another and realizing the time when they are no longer a complete part of us. The mystical wand no longer waves, days and nights are now spent alone, but still filled with the memory and essence of that person, that love, that "all of all" that once was such a vital part of you. The child that was inside this lovely being has grown up, but now gone leaving you to perhaps cry as a child.
I truly feel the heartbeat of your words as well as the tears spilled for wanting once more that which is no longer to "be".
What could possibly be added to make it better, and you indicate it needs something - I say not. It is beautiful!
O' air of the night and day
Please do not stay yet away!
Come! Softly blow cross me now.
Renew then my lover's vow
To ever be one with me.
Yes! Mine for eternity!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Dear Sheila!
It's a true rarity to receive a review nearly as deeply rewarding, gr.. read more
Sheila Kline

1 Year Ago

May I take the liberty to expand the final words I have penned in response to yours and post them as.. read more
Richard

1 Year Ago


Aye; yet, might eternity e'er pass
upon these star-crossed lad 'n lass,
nay sh.. read more
This is what happens when you master your craft. Without thought of the very things you have helped me with, you pen this. The need to let your quill and ink flow freely often produces the best pieces, and that is my only critique, it is every bit as the best of your work, besides the emotion, the content, and the flow, it is real. THAT'S what makes it amoungts your best Welcome to the dark side Richard my friend, that heart you wear on your sleeve is showing.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

Many grateful thanks, Bill!
After reading each reviewer's take on this one, I'm beginning to .. read more
Hey, Richard, what's missing?
I think its beautiful, the thoughts of loss alongside the joys. The whole write feels like an ache that's too deep to rub out.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Richard

1 Year Ago

"DANG!"

Matt,
I've really gotten behind in commenting on reviews, and I see th.. read more

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