Rain

Rain

A Poem by Rita L. Sev
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It started raining pennies,

then nickels joined the pour;

dimes descended from the clouds

and quarters hit the floor


The coins, they knocked unconscious 
the folks who stormed outside,
clutching pots and pitchers
all full of selfish pride


And when the sun came out again,
the coins evaporated
before those greedy souls could fill
their vessels up to sated


So, content we'll have to be 
with simple water rains;
they sparkle just as readily 
and humble Nature gains


© 2015 Rita L. Sev



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Hello. I posted a few poems on this site years ago and have now returned. At the time, you were were one who "friended" me.
I enjoyed this poem for both the imagery of raining coins and the message, but also because you rhymed and metered it, something I do with all of my poems. I just posted my first poem and am not yet familiar with Rating and Points, so I hope the rating I gave is not offensive. Richard (richom)

Posted 1 Month Ago


I like the rhythm of your poetry. And this is a nice bit of tricksy fairy magic as well. It reminds me of that old movie "Darby O'Gill and the Little People"; the way the leprechauns tricked people who were just plain old greedy.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lovely poem, I like both the message and the rhythm when reading it and it reminds me of how much I like the bloom of nature after a lot of rain :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Excellent message in the most poetic way possible. I really like the imagery in the first stanza... :))

Posted 1 Year Ago


Rita L. Sev

1 Year Ago

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed!
What a great message, I really enjoyed this.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Rita L. Sev

1 Year Ago

Thanks, Ghostlyhearts! Glad you liked it!
Greed, a disgusting and deplorable human trait

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

2 Years Ago

Indeed it is... Thank you, Motherless
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I recieved a strong visual from this piece! It's almost like seeing something out of a short film. And--as always--beautiful rhyme scheme, too. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much, R.M! :)
message brilliantly conveyed and the rhyme flow is wonderful!! i also enjoyed the subtle alliteration! well done!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Indra! So glad you enjoyed!
Indra Neil

2 Years Ago

u r most welcome! :)
what about susan b anthony $ coins?

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

2 Years Ago

;) That's for a much more severe storm...
...and during a drought?

Its often said just how little a penny is worth - but someone ALWAYS picks them up ...go figure.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Rita L. Sev

2 Years Ago

Ah yes - but those random pennies are said to be from souls in the heavenly realm... who are we not .. read more

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Rita L. Sev

Philadelphia, PA



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