Under The Rose Trellis

Choka, the longest of Japanese Haiku type poem...

                             Running Pale Pink Rose

                       On the trellis grows_soft scent

                             Wafts on morning air

                   

                               Under rose trellis

                       You steal a kiss__Oh! Blissful

                            Lips that taste of rose

 

Author's Note

Choka, written in response to competition that said leave me breathless..

Reviews

[David Scott]

There is something special about a rose, a kiss, and a poem...
They are all rather "minuscule" in the grand scheme of things. Yet, they all have the power to change this world into a better place...
Much like you Sara as an author... Making the world a better place.
Lovely!

[Becky C Strukamp]

Yes it did leave one breathless. Loved it.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Beautiful visions of roses and love! Yes in deed breath taking!

[Dreamer]

whoa, this is beautiful. This piece is short but the stories I can imagine from this piece are endless. It leaves me in a sort of blissful mood. Great write:) Im adding this

[Kenneth The Poet]

Nice work, I like this and the photograph makes the impact all the greater.

[WindSong]

This is breathtakingly beautiful poetry at its best. I love it! You write so graciously with softly tuned words.

[Muse]

So short and sweet! To steal a kiss, loved the analogy!

[KAREN]

This poem is beautiful and breathtaking all in one. I can smell the rose as I read, the imagery made it real. I love reading Haiku poems!

[LA Lorena]

A stunner! Very nicely done. Simple, elegant, and sweet as a rose.