God in the Ninth Inning

God in the Ninth Inning

A Poem by sinNsincerity

Women think deep!

Who do you think taught me?

Who do you think inspired this poetry?

Who do you think?

Quite insistent.

Smell the incense?

White M@gik!

But deeper I go;

Quite subliminal...

Because lately,

Mrs. 7even-6ix  has forgotten about me.

She was digging me...

The horned mermaid left me at sea.

My Capricornuns Mistress.

Showing and taking it all in a blink.

3rd 3y3ed sacrifice.

Exposing me,

So I can view her compositions.

Feeling the feelings,

But the honesty of humanity

Has told me

F**K YOUR FEELINGS!

Quite insistent.

So I read in the lines-

In between my mind

In between my honesty

In between...

But please,

Please,

Get out of me.



© 2016 sinNsincerity



Author's Note

sinNsincerity
Abracadabara
I create as I speak



Battle-Star-Galactica Heart/Love,
Novela,
Gothspel-Poetry,
Done-with-Secular-Poerty,
Are-U-Still-Down,
Magik

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i definitely enjoyed this.

with the first line "women think deep!" i can interpret this two ways, which make the following parts have different meanings. it's either a plea for women to think deep or a statement that deep thinking is what women do. i'm not sure if you intended this as ambiguous but my first read-through was the interpretation that it's a plea for women to think deep about why you write poetry, and the answer is because of another woman. haha. i can, sadly, relate. haha.

i laughed pretty hard at the "F**K YOUR FEELINGS" part because i didn't expect to read that so boldly, but i definitely see the truth of how 'humanity' tells guys to interpret women's feelings. i like the word play in the next few lines about 'reading between.' i really like the creativity you got here. damn good!

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

Well personally, women are the closest thing to God, so I worship them as well... Every women I have.. read more



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It's an interesting piece. The inclusion of numbers is strange to me, but I'm sure there's a meaning behind it. I don't know what it is though. There is a very noticeable sense of sadness in the poem and I feel like there is a message saying that life doesn't care about your feelings, you're expected to move on through it no matter what.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

The doctor have deep meeting indeed, I speak on it but figuratively. Not a deep sadness, not to say .. read more
Poetry really isn't my thing, but I really like this piece. It was very interesting, and I love the use of numbers and symbols. Also, the poem in itself is very dynamic. The first couple of lines I read with confidence, but then when I read "The horned mermaid left me at sea", I felt the poem take a sad turn. And towards the end it felt like you were shouting and pleading.

Very cool stuff.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

1 Year Ago

I'm glad it had a sense of attraction.
I'm also glad you noticed the juxtaposition because i.. read more

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