Maggots in his smile

Maggots in his smile

A Chapter by Lyn Anderson
"

past lives

"
 "How ya doing?" (without me)
 he said,
 and the death of their love
 was betrayed by the
 maggots in his smile.
 
 The tenderness in his voice
 to her ears sounded like tin;
 his memory's caress
 nibbled at the corners
 of her painted grin.
 
 She mumbled "fine",
 and walked away on leaden feet,
 sickened by the taste of yesterday
 in the spittle she absently
 wiped off her chin.




© 2016 Lyn Anderson



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Lyn Anderson

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I love the way you use original & super-yukky descriptive ways (maggots & spittle) to show us how this unwelcomed meeting felt. My favorite part is the first line, where the parenthetical phrase says more than the rest of your poem (it's all about HIM in his own mind). I love the way this doesn't convey disgust, exactly . . . but so much revulsion shown thru body language.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

9 Months Ago

Thank you for popping by this one. I hope to be more present in 2017.
You stopped to talk. Not worth the bother. Onwards and upwards. All the best for 2017 Kara.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

9 Months Ago

It was a very long time ago. But some things stick with you.
Whew! Do I love this poem. Description, metaphor, the taste of it all salting my eyes.

Regards,
Al

Posted 9 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

9 Months Ago

Thank you and Merry Season to you. I shall endeavour to be more present in the New Year.:)
Alfred Kukitz

9 Months Ago

A little kiss on your red lips!
Obviously an old one that still burns and leaves scars.
A good poem about a bad situation. A good write, KL

Posted 10 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much. Yes, this one stung a lot, and led me on a path I regret in many ways. But these .. read more
This one packs an emotional punch, KL. What once was tender is now tinny. What once warmed us, leaves us cold. Time changes so many things. What a powerful write this is. Lydi**

Posted 10 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Months Ago

Thanks. This was one of those tough relationships that never left me.
perfect poem ... visual, visceral and very emotive as i feel all the thoughts going on in her head ...his audacity, her chagrined in the meeting not looked for .. his arrogant, taunting words ...she tries her best to play the game but the physical illness is overwhelming .. i love this poem ..you say it all .. a whole history in 3 verses .. i want to punch his face >;{
E.

Posted 10 Months Ago


Lyn Anderson

10 Months Ago

Thanks. This one stung pretty bad.
Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

i'm sorry :((
You have a unique style that I like. The imagery is brutally distasteful. And I mean that in a good way. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Lyn Anderson

1 Year Ago

Thanks. This particular relationship was one that left me hurt for a long time. Every once in a whil.. read more
Paloma

1 Year Ago

I have one of those, I understand completely.
bitter taste of yesterday can ruin the appetite for tomorrow.. I love the vivid imagery and descriptions in here.. damn girl... real, raw, and freaking awesome...

Posted 3 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

3 Years Ago

Thanks a lot. This one is a historic thing that has teeth.
Jeez, left a really bad after taste in my mouth. Great write from you KL.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Matching Socks

3 Years Ago

Dirty rotten meat...
Matching Socks

3 Years Ago

Dirty rotten meat...
Matching Socks

3 Years Ago

Yikes. X 2
Dark and fantastic...had a touch of King to it!! And you know he is my favorite writer. You knocked this maggot filled skull out of the park...ha

Posted 3 Years Ago


Lyn Anderson

3 Years Ago

thanks, I did think of King when I wrote it.:)
redflutterby

3 Years Ago

I thought you might have! Ive missed your writing. :-)

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