With you

With you

A Poem by Ashley Lytle
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Dedicated to my friend. Thank you for being such a great role model for me. You represent everything I wish I could be but I let fear hold me back from being. Since I've met you I've broken free.

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You are my savior 
Letting me flourish 
Your words pull me in 
Back to safety 
A smile which cannot be contained 
Possessed only by you 
Lights up my face 
With you 
You are my savior 
Your words reach miles 
Building me back up 
With you the weight is gone 
You represent my desires 
A desire for a freedom 
A freedom you hold so freely 
To stand tall like you 
It is my greatest wish  
You are my savior 
Building me up to shine 
So I can shine bright like you 
Taking me in 
Letting me see 
That fear should never hold me back 
With you anything is possible 
You are my savior 
Helping to guide me out of the dark 
With you 
I believe 
With you 
I am free

© 2015 Ashley Lytle


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Never let your mind cloud your judgement. I enjoyed your poem. You could shorten the dedication a little. There are a lot of I's. In your dedication, try this example:" You represent everything I wish to be, fear, and what holds me back from being.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ashley Lytle

8 Years Ago

Thank you!
wow .. what a mind blowing piece of work ... i must say your are an outstanding writer ... !!!! love this last stanza 'with you
i believe
with you
i am free "
100 % ratings from me


Posted 8 Years Ago


Ashley Lytle

8 Years Ago

thank you so much!
zunie frost

8 Years Ago

welcome !!!!
You've got a very emotional piece of writing here with a very deep feeling coming out into the light. This kind of poems towards friends tend to warm up my heart more than others. This deserves 100 points. Great write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Ashley Lytle

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Good job, Ashley! Your friend is lucky to have someone who knows their worth, and you are lucky to have a friend who helps you stand back up. Not everyone can say the same. Well done.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashley Lytle

8 Years Ago

Thank you! ☺️
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Sally Hope

8 Years Ago

You're welcome. Send me more read requests when you wish.
Well i can't say anything other than what others said. The poem is beautiful and its full of emotions reading it was a nice way to start my day.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashley Lytle

8 Years Ago

thank you :)
This is honestly so beautiful. I can tell you treasure your friend as much as they treasure you :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashley Lytle

8 Years Ago

Thank you ☺️
I absolutely adore this piece, I feel the emotion and can't help but think of my best friend. 💜

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashley Lytle

8 Years Ago

Thank you! :) I'm glad
Very nice. How wonderful for you to have a friend like that. You did very well in portraying your feelings and emotions here. Good job!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ashley Lytle

8 Years Ago

Thank you! :)
MelissaAndres

8 Years Ago

You're very welcome!

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