Cry for Help

Cry for Help

A Poem by AaronFreitas
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Here is something I wrote about 8 years ago... originally written to be a song back in the day but made a few adjustments to share.

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Nothing but my shadow staring back at me

I walk alone down these empty streets

A child nearby asks for change

To buy his fix, what a f*****g shame

 

Down the street… a w***e for sale

Searching for love, you couldn’t tell

Sex for crack is her way of life

Life’s clock is ticking waiting for her to die

 

And no one cares enough to try

To solve these problems which suffocate life

 

A thieving bum worn to his destined domicile

Begs for forgiveness, yet lives in denial

No room for him in our over populated jails

He’s left to slowly descend into hell

 

A mother walks this forlorn street

Disappointed and crumbled in defeat

And even though she tries to hide her pain

You hear her cries bleed out in vain

 

And no one cares enough to try

To solve these problems which suffocate life

 

Destructive behavior that will never be fixed

To these evil streets you are affixed

You take everything for granted like you do

What would you do if it happened to you?


© 2015 AaronFreitas



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It's a great write, about something we either change, or better get.used to it.
Since not everyone wants to do anything, other than point fingers, and wait for someone else to do something... I don't know what to do. let's not forget, that nothing, and no one forced these people to do what they do. (other than the prostitutes).
Whatever they go through, is just a simple consequence of their choices, and actions. Though i think we would need to help them. But then again, you, or i cannot do much on our own.

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

You make a good point... in all honesty without a boatload of money the only things we really can do.. read more
Dani The Unreviewed

2 Years Ago

you're welcome. :)
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This is very relevant social commentary. I do believe that no government programs and/or support could truly help if the persons involved do not want to change themselves.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

You are right... people have to want change in order to change. People can lend a hand to help some.. read more
As a song it works well. As a poem...I liked the descriptive observations. I think for me the first line sets the reader up, almost directs the way the writer would have it read. Enjoyed.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

1 Year Ago

Thank you Patricia :) It was written to be a song originally then I played with it some and made a .. read more
Some things people do just in order to get by. They need to pay bills or feed their kids or themselves. It's a shame of what level we people have stooped to at times...it's so sad also to see those who go through this type of struggle. We all just gotta put our big adult underwear on and just face the day like a boss, be it good or bad, just gotta keep pushing through.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Life is a struggle and sometimes one thing leads to worse. I appreciate your review :)
True true. Take things for granted whether here or there. Often we cant see the way out of our circumstances or imagine what it's like for people in different circumstances. Striking poetry.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much Poet Face :) I appreciate your comments :)
Wow, I really like this! It really points out that many people go through their own kind of hell. While we have our own, our neighbor has theirs, and the hooker on the corner has hers. When going through a hard time we always feel alone, and usually are. In a way its comforting to know that other people have problems too. Great work :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

We live in a world that is loaded with problems... I guess it's just easier to not have an emotion t.. read more
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Tee
wow so much pain conveyed,
i love these lines

And no one cares enough to try
To solve these problems which suffocate life

A sad and touching piece, great job

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Tee :) It's an older write... the first of my old ones I've posted. :)
Sorry this took so long to review. I'm just getting back into the swing of things with writing now that I'm done with school. Anyway, this piece really reminded me of the song called Don't Laugh At Me. Check it out some time.

https://youtu.be/FVjbo8dW9c8



Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Aries1984

2 Years Ago

At least the school you went to used something more touching for a song to an anti bullying video. A.. read more
AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

SMH... haha thats a crazy story. Even crazier is my High School my freshman year was Roosevelt High.. read more
Aries1984

2 Years Ago

I think I remember you mentioning that in another review response lol.
You have captured your audience with poetic form and such attention to detail and tone.

This holds our attention throughout

and uses of description and plot to build suspense and interest.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you my friend :) This one is an old write... something I wanted to share back from when I was.. read more
I agree with your logic.
"Destructive behavior that will never be fixed
To these evil streets you are affixed
You take everything for granted like you do
What would you do if it happened to you?"
Life is hard for some people. Easy to fall down, hard to rise-up. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote



Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you Coyote. I'm sure that most people that end up in that situation didn't see themselves in .. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

I agree and you are welcome.
This hits.
Described humans so well. Amazing work.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AaronFreitas

2 Years Ago

Thank you very much PeaceOfMind :) Appreciate your review

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