"stick a needle in your eye
step on all the cracks
break your mother's back"
Oooooh flip flops, love! This is a dark, powerful write. A lot of really vivid lines that make you go ouch! Ha, This is another outstanding write from you. I don't think the darkness would ever leave us fully, we just kind of get used to it being there, we have so much in our mind that it is weighing us down and yet, we still try and remain strong for others around us.
~ Noodlebumble ~~
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10 Years Ago
Wooo another flip flops from Sye....made my night! x
"stick a needle in your eye
step on all the cracks
break your mother's back"
Oooooh flip flops, love! This is a dark, powerful write. A lot of really vivid lines that make you go ouch! Ha, This is another outstanding write from you. I don't think the darkness would ever leave us fully, we just kind of get used to it being there, we have so much in our mind that it is weighing us down and yet, we still try and remain strong for others around us.
~ Noodlebumble ~~
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Wooo another flip flops from Sye....made my night! x
Ferocious and very dark, yet very brilliant. And the picture you posted with this piece is creepy. (*shivers up my spine*) One might not want to read this one alone in the dark. Excellent!
This one almost felt like a stream of consciousness type poem to me, like you were winding down a spiral of thoughts that eventually took form in a question that holds the entirety of the piece together. I like the bit about child play, I still avoid stepping on cracks when walking, something my child's mind never grew out of.;)
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10 Years Ago
I think you're right Astro, it practically wrote itself to be honest, just my thoughts came pouring .. read moreI think you're right Astro, it practically wrote itself to be honest, just my thoughts came pouring out, thanks so much, and ha to the stepping on cracks, I think a lot of people still shun that. ;-)
A very intense piece with a lot of imagery I would not associate with you traditionally, along with some I would :P Love the final line as well...powerful work my friend.
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10 Years Ago
I should have thrown a zephyr in there for you Benji! :-) Thanks so much...
10 Years Ago
Haha I'm sure you'll find lots of room for zephyrs in future works Mrs.R, and maybe one for me :)
Hi Frieda. A very good dark write that's eerie and wrought with a raging passion. Well crafted free verse. Good imagery and descriptives. You paint a vivid picture of destruction and cruelty with ferocity. Deep expression of emotion. Angry and powerful. Well penned. Write on!
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10 Years Ago
Oh how I love your reviews Shelley, you have to teach me how to do that, thanks my friend!
This felt like you really did not want to get out of bed! It felt like a physical struggle to get your body working and that to do so took so much energy.
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10 Years Ago
Exactly Gabriel, some things we don't want to face in the light of day...thanks.
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..