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Remains

Remains

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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captcha: "illguide"

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Remains

decay fermenting
white light halos the darkness
in birth, our remains

6/16/2017
E.

© 2017 Einstein Noodle



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Ha-hah!
An appropriate "captcha", Gene.
Well,there won't be any fermenting of my olde carcass … it will end as ash. I like the word "fermenting", though, as it brings to mind the fizz, foam, and froth of beer, as bizarre as the thought of "body beer" is … oh-MY!
Now, talk about mind bending, this is the epitome of abstract poetry to wrap our grey cells around. But, considering the "premise" ; ) of reincarnation, it makes perfect sense … LOL!
Almost, a Senryu, with the exception of L2, but that can be easily remedied with an "of".

I like the way your mind works, Gene … you're every bit as weird as me, if not weirder! ⁓ Richard : )


(a 90 for this one, due to the missing "of", or whatever you come up with … love the title, too)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cryingkate

12 Months Ago

Pass that Jug Gene...
Einstein Noodle

12 Months Ago

hic! :-}
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Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

brilliant craic guys !!!!!!!
xDD



Reviews

Sometimes less is more, or so they say. Well in that case, I would say this is more or less morevelous....N

Posted 10 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

10 Months Ago

ahahaha thanks Neville ... i could not feel morevelous gratified by your review .. certainly appreci.. read more
Life and death are just mirrors of more important realities. The reflections are there for all to see because they linger like shadows in corners of dreams. But like Aesop's dog some go after one with a vengeance and lose the substance they seek.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

oh we sure do don't we? ... wonderful thoughts and review Fabian .. not sure we have met before so m.. read more
I adore the "Remains" of the poem. Kurt Cobain is a legend even though I never thought he was a genius. I don't like when artists kill themselves since I have battled through suicide. Thank you for sharing this. :D The poem itself is beautifully dark.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Vria P Crow

11 Months Ago

Awe thank you so much for your strength. *hugs I am always sad and disapointed when someone passes.. read more
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

:( ............ love and peace and joy to you my friend!
Vria P Crow

11 Months Ago

You as well! Peace! :D
wonderful...one of the more powerful Haiku's especially when you say it out loud and in one breath..In the end you get dizzy, have to drink something cool, with large cubes of ice in it...
Try speaking this one aloud....try to keep your voice at the same pitch while you get to the end..
You can't. because pitch is slavish to meaning and
"remains' whether yours or mine or a strangers,
is fanatical.....great poem....dana

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh my goodness dana! i could not ask for any better response to this one ..thank you so much ..did y.. read more
Seems your mind took a sweet turn when you wrote these words, my friend... brief, succinct and strangely inspiring thoughts here to there and back again. Your daughter's gift might have set you off, or perhaps there's been something brewing deep within for some time.. what- and whichever has certainly resulted in food for thought and yet again, admiration for the way you produce your wonders.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

emma your review has made my day ..I think I better sign off the cafe for the day now ;) and hold th.. read more
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

Blessings and gentle thoughts..
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

:) .......................
Ha-hah!
An appropriate "captcha", Gene.
Well,there won't be any fermenting of my olde carcass … it will end as ash. I like the word "fermenting", though, as it brings to mind the fizz, foam, and froth of beer, as bizarre as the thought of "body beer" is … oh-MY!
Now, talk about mind bending, this is the epitome of abstract poetry to wrap our grey cells around. But, considering the "premise" ; ) of reincarnation, it makes perfect sense … LOL!
Almost, a Senryu, with the exception of L2, but that can be easily remedied with an "of".

I like the way your mind works, Gene … you're every bit as weird as me, if not weirder! ⁓ Richard : )


(a 90 for this one, due to the missing "of", or whatever you come up with … love the title, too)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Cryingkate

12 Months Ago

Pass that Jug Gene...
Einstein Noodle

12 Months Ago

hic! :-}
................
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

brilliant craic guys !!!!!!!
xDD
I imagine that you wanted to hint at the cycles of birth and rebirth here perhaps, trying to connect dying to being reborn...the way the decaying gets fermented and transformed into something more valuable, something more beautiful than its predecessor.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh Fairest one! i love your positive take on this ...we do hope that the fermenting produces a fine .. read more
"Life can be short or long." We're born, we move and breathe, we're agitated, happy, sad....all that. Then...well, you know the rest. Perhaps we are recycled in some other kind of life. It's weird, I have this recollection of nuts in the backyard, climbing trees and something about a car coming near me. Hmm? well, never mind.
good one. :P

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahahahaha ... I have eaten many times at the original Road Kill Cafe in Sturgis SD ... I use to thin.. read more
Here today, gone tomorrow and as for in between? Well, that's up to You!

A stoic message in abbreviated poetic form, kudos E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Tom! always good to see you here at the cafe .. i appreciate you taking time to read and revi.. read more
I'm wondering why the decay is fermenting? Too much yeast perhaps? Do you think we can get some of that fermenting decay, well how bout this, I will have my fermenting decaying remains sent over your way. You can make some moonshine out of me, only to be drunken when the moon is at it's fullest and only to be had all at once by you alone ... :D hahaha yeah ... I a little bit of me and you ... then you must write a poem and dedicate it to all the remains of another day :D

Love ME X

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh what fun and fine belly laugh you give me this morning Sparkle .. can i call you "Sparkle" ? yes... read more
KWP

1 Year Ago

Now listen E ... I am thinking 'Elizabethan Broth' makes me sound like a plump lady of the house who.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahahahaha ..OK ... how about Liz's Bordeau of Beers ... she can be dressed in bordello finery ... al.. read more

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