sitting on the roof

circle of life

                                  Sitting on the roof,

                                As a 5 years old  sprout.

                                 Thinking of this clouds

                                 Why do they always flurry?

                         Are they also afraid of their mom's shout?

                                  As the nature is fussy 

                                 The dawn breaks down.

                                  Sitting on the roof 

                               As a 21 years old chap

                              With a wanna be spouse,

                           She tells the talk of the town,

                            As i see the sun goes down.

                        With a satisfactory grin on his face.

                      And thus the day dismisses for the day.

                      

                                 Sitting on the roof 

                                As a 86 years old senile

                           With little memory in my mind 

                       Of the name with which i had to die

                     The sun shows up with a tear in his eyes

                     I waved to him because this was the time

                                 To bid a final goodbye                           

                            

Reviews

[dw817]

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This was really nice. It reminds me of the song, "Cats In The Cradle" by Harry Chapin.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7OqwKfgLaeA
You might add some more year intervals as life can definitely take some turns in a short amount of time.
Thanks for sharing your thoughtful poem. :)

[Harsh]

thanks for your review..........
and i will try my best to add some more circles of life..............

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the journey in the poem. I like the three places you took me. Change is part of life. I like the ending. Good to say goodbye to the friendly sun at the end. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Harsh]

thanks Coyote Poetry.........................

[Zero_Edge88]

Time flies and this one just warped itself to a level of a great speed from boy to man to elder. It's as if there was a sphinx watching this person grow into the passage of time itself. Missing was the infant that could have possibly been held out on top of the highest yet safe place around to consider that they were in a higher ground. It would have definitely made up for that.
Thanks for the piece and have a great weekend :)

[Harsh]

well would definitely try to add some phases of like.
thanks for the review.......

[Rosaria_V]

This was great, it was really sweet and deep. It made me think too haha

[Harsh]

thanks Rosaria...........

[Douglas White]

Harsh, this was a small, but very eloquently written poem, which I enjoyed immensely. Thank you for the RR. This really makes you pause and think of the passage of time and life. Very well done.

[Harsh]

thank you Douglas.........