Dooms day in Reading High school!!!

this is another dream i had i turned it into a storie because i couldnt turn it into a poem so hope you enjoy give me advice should i keep on going and make up more to it?

Dooms day in Reading High school !!!!

 

  I was in my old school in Reading Michigan,

I told people were doomed,

Were doomed,

There’s a huge giant flying bird that’s a dinosaur,

Outside and it was flying around trying to get it’s pray no one believed me and when it was lunch time,

People looked at me and said, “You’re stupid, you’re retarted, you don’t know what you’re talking about,

Then one of my friends came up to me, here here are some treats,

Get your dog’s its war time,

Still no one believed it until they seen a huge taradoctal

Flying around,

Then one of the teachers had a huge machine gun and said, “Let’s get this thing take it down,

Come on.”

War after three hours they finally got him down, “But soon to find out it was a girl.

It was trying to pertect her baby. So me and my fiend Roxanne went up to it and took care of the baby, we feed it and it seemed to like us.

So days went by.

The end,

By: Jennifer little

Author's Note

tell me what you think this was another dream i had that is true just wonering if you think i should keep on going and make up some more to it ...... add on to it all thats in here was in my dream stoped at the end of my dream ...

Reviews

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Interesting structure. It looks like a mixture of poem/story. Thanks for sharing your dreams with us!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

This is a different dream, about a creature from the dinosaur time. I like this, only think I would say to do is look it over for grammar. I enjoyed this part:
"seen a huge taradoctal

Flying around,

Then one of the teachers had a huge machine gun and said, “Let’s get this thing take it down,"

[T. Michele Smock]

we all have weird dreams

[CrimsonBlaze]

You should make a sequel to it ! :) Interesting dream you got there! I know a couple ways this could go if you were going to continue it. You never know! One dream can turn into a full blown book or story! Keep it up if you can!

[misscb]

I liked it but I definitely think you should make it longer... Good start though...